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    dots Submission Name: World's Clonesdots
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    Author: Indelible_ink
    ASL Info:    20/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.75 - 143/109/25
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 1008
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 410



    Description:
       This is one of my shortest poems, but with a thousand hidden meanings. This one is basically the youth today trying to be like the movie stars and pop stars, and athletes, but mainly their Idols, don't really have it all together. Feedback please! :)


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    dotsWorld's Clonesdots
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    Trapped in a mirror
    Images engraved into their mind
    Bottled by their peers
    Holding on a mountain impossible to climb
    Following masked statues
    Idolizing sorrow
    Hoping life will catch you
    To be the same tomorrow
    Black and white lifeless beings
    Copies of one another
    No vision worth seeing
    But to ridicule each other




    Submitted on 2005-06-22 10:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a very telling piece that affirmed your description. It is scarier & scarier that our society encourages youth and others to be like people that half the time aren't very real or moral. Whatever happened to idols like Emerson, Thoreau, etc.?
    Good commentary piece!
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Exactly my thoughts. Youth are always trying to be like stars but half of todays stars have many regrets and do things they shouldnt. That isnt a thing the youth should be idolizing. Lol im saying youth and im only 15 lol.
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Roguex | [ Reply to This ]


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