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    dots Submission Name: Self-Disciplinedots
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    Author: bluepifany
    ASL Info:    27/F/Phoenix Arizona
    Elite Ratio:    4.3 - 174/147/33
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       oh well, sometimes it happens to the best of you:)


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    dotsSelf-Disciplinedots
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    Science fiction friction
    pulsating within,
    verging to pull back,
    dipping again.

    Sensory Perception
    Blitzkrieg heat,
    melting inside out,
    spilling on que.

    Earthquaking rocks...



    I am disapponted in you.




    Submitted on 2005-06-22 11:14:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what what now? what is this about? Drugs? sex? Disappointment over what? I have no idea but good details ^.^ tee hee
    -Alli
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a bit confused. I read this several times but I dont think I get it?! It sounds like sex to me but the title throws me. It would be more appropriate to title it Self-control if it was sex related so I must be wrong?? I dunno I cant figure it out! Good thoughts though! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      haha what this sounds like to me is that he was a "one minute man" maybe the self discipline you are speaking of in your title is the fact that he needs to pace himself and learn some self control so he can last longer.. i am not sure if i got this right but hey everyone comes up with their own conclusions this is just what i got out of it. good work:)
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    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay! Sounds like the case of a man with some good pipe that had a short night! LOL That's sad. Tell him to drink some liquor next time-and some red bull. Great piece and awesome details. Loved the language too.

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    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      haha.. I take this to be about a guy.. and quick sex.. are you dissapointed b/c you were to quick to jump the gun and you regret it? If I'm wrong help me out so I have a better understanding thanks.. definitely a differnt way to describe a situation and grab the reader
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]


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