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    dots Submission Name: Eyes Of the Beholderdots
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    Author: Indelible_ink
    ASL Info:    20/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.75 - 143/109/25
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Limerick/Satire
    Total Views: 1495
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    Bytes: 1106



    Description:
       I just made this to have a meaning, but humor in it. It's a series of limericks in one poem, if you're wondering. One of my first satire poems, so bear with me. Feedback please! :)


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    dotsEyes Of the Beholderdots
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    God please show me true beauty, one of the purest type
    Asked a man of many lusts and nothing is just right
    But once ďbeautyĒ graced his eyes
    The man began to cry
    For God created beauty, to look like his ex-wife

    Lord I know the most evil person, but I would like you to pick
    Ask the judgmental man, overall a self-righteous prick
    Yet when evil came into view
    Curse words began to spew
    For God began to show him evil, and it was he God depict

    God show me the truest love, itís what I need for many trials
    Asked one with desperation, asked the orphaned child
    No, it didnít take less than a second
    For love to come when beckoned
    For God is the truest love, and heíll be there all the while

    All in the eyes of the beholder, should our perceptions reign?
    Or see it from another point of view, and knowledge do we gain?
    Iíll say yes! Yes to it all
    And tear down that idealistic wall
    Iíll stand firm in my bizarre views, and forever be called insane




    Submitted on 2005-06-22 11:36:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      for me i have to say this is unique i have never ever read any thing like this ....
    i enjoyed all four limericks/satire ...

    i was in and out of seeing the humor ....my favs are

    God please show me true beauty, one of the purest type
    Asked a man of many lusts and nothing is just right
    But once ďbeautyĒ graced his eyes
    The man began to cry
    For God created beauty, to look like his ex-wife

    All in the eyes of the beholder, should our perceptions reign?
    Or see it from another point of view, and knowledge do we gain?
    Iíll say yes! Yes to it all
    And tear down that idealistic wall
    Iíll stand firm in my bizarre views, and forever be called insane


    Well done Indelible_ink

    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this! I agree...it's all in the eye of the beholder. I found this funny at points and I like poems that make me laugh or smile. I like the rhyming scheme in this. Very true and very creative. You don't come across many poems like this one. Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! That was so good. I liked it, and the first two limericks made me giggle. It was fun, so much fun to read, and the messages were there, which was good also, because it made it more captivating, so the people who read it saw it, and it was fun. Powerful message, and a great poem.
    Good job
    Peace and love,
    Aya
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! Yes, it is all in the eye of the beholder aint it? But I dont see the beauty in the ex thing because there had to be something ugly about her/him that he/she saw. The last stanza was pretty cool too. I liked it overall. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the rhyming scheme of aabba; it works well for the poem. I like the ideas you discuss as well of having to look at things from a different perspective. Word choice is honest and forthright; well-written. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by literary lover | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was quite creative, very well written & truthfully entertaining. I liked how you welded the opposites together & particularly loved the first stanza & how beauty was his ex wife! Very well done & got a good laugh out of it!
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This was truly a good first try at satirical poetry. I like the group limerick appoach, it is really unique. I too have tried my hand at satire recently, give "He actually read the bill" a read on my page - oixi.
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]


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