Eyes Of the Beholder by Indelible

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Submission Name: Eyes Of the Beholder dots

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Author:	Indelible_ink
ASL Info:	18/F/AZ
Elite Ratio:	5.7 - 141/107/23
Words:	189

Class/Type:	Limerick/Satire
Total Views:	389
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1106

Description:
I just made this to have a meaning, but humor in it. It's a series of limericks in one poem, if you're wondering. One of my first satire poems, so bear with me. Feedback please! :)

Eyes Of the Beholder dots

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God please show me true beauty, one of the purest type
Asked a man of many lusts and nothing is just right
But once “beauty” graced his eyes
The man began to cry
For God created beauty, to look like his ex-wife

Lord I know the most evil person, but I would like you to pick
Ask the judgmental man, overall a self-righteous prick
Yet when evil came into view
Curse words began to spew
For God began to show him evil, and it was he God depict

God show me the truest love, it’s what I need for many trials
Asked one with desperation, asked the orphaned child
No, it didn’t take less than a second
For love to come when beckoned
For God is the truest love, and he’ll be there all the while

All in the eyes of the beholder, should our perceptions reign?
Or see it from another point of view, and knowledge do we gain?
I’ll say yes! Yes to it all
And tear down that idealistic wall
I’ll stand firm in my bizarre views, and forever be called insane

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  for me i have to say this is unique i have never ever read any thing like this ....
i enjoyed all four limericks/satire ...

i was in and out of seeing the humor ....my favs are

God please show me true beauty, one of the purest type
Asked a man of many lusts and nothing is just right
But once “beauty” graced his eyes
The man began to cry
For God created beauty, to look like his ex-wife

All in the eyes of the beholder, should our perceptions reign?
Or see it from another point of view, and knowledge do we gain?
I’ll say yes! Yes to it all
And tear down that idealistic wall
I’ll stand firm in my bizarre views, and forever be called insane

Well done Indelible_ink

| Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved this! I agree...it's all in the eye of the beholder. I found this funny at points and I like poems that make me laugh or smile. I like the rhyming scheme in this. Very true and very creative. You don't come across many poems like this one. Good job!
| Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
  Ha! That was so good. I liked it, and the first two limericks made me giggle. It was fun, so much fun to read, and the messages were there, which was good also, because it made it more captivating, so the people who read it saw it, and it was fun. Powerful message, and a great poem.
Good job
Peace and love,
Aya
| Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
  HA! Yes, it is all in the eye of the beholder aint it? But I dont see the beauty in the ex thing because there had to be something ugly about her/him that he/she saw. The last stanza was pretty cool too. I liked it overall. Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the rhyming scheme of aabba; it works well for the poem. I like the ideas you discuss as well of having to look at things from a different perspective. Word choice is honest and forthright; well-written. Keep it up.
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by literary lover | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this was quite creative, very well written & truthfully entertaining. I liked how you welded the opposites together & particularly loved the first stanza & how beauty was his ex wife! Very well done & got a good laugh out of it!
Love,Peace,Joy!
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This was truly a good first try at satirical poetry. I like the group limerick appoach, it is really unique. I too have tried my hand at satire recently, give "He actually read the bill" a read on my page - oixi.
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]

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