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Fifty Years and Beyond

Author: oixi
ASL Info:    50/M/California
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Words: 119
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just recently had my fiftieth birthday and I got inspired to write a little verse about it. Let me know what you think.

Fifty Years and Beyond

On the first day of fifty years
Agony began for middle past
I muddled through the growing fears
Eventually to realize at long last

Like the lamp left on for too long
Where the bulb glows bright than abruptly dims
Weakly now where I once strode strong
Like the dimming light are once youthful whims

Feats taken for granted are no more
Surely as the tree grows crooked with time
Youthful skills become forgotten lore
And I truly feel I’m beyond my prime

At fifty years and down the road
Over the hill a gray abyss is seen
Like a Prince turned back to a toad
Alas growing old is not just a dream

Submitted on 2005-06-22 13:41:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, this is a great friggin' write. Honesty in every line rings out as the others have said.

"Where the bulb glows bright than abruptly dims"
that would have to be one of my fave lines in this poem. Such a great display of imagery about life.
| Posted on 2005-06-25 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
  Well done. This poem speaks for me too as I'm getting on up in the years also. It's well written, it's meaning clear. It's a great poem and I enjoyed reading it. God bless.
| Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by bgj | [ Reply to This ]
  the title alone speaks volumes about something that i can get into whole heartedly.if i can get another 10 years of succes and even more, i'll be laughing myself to sleep at night.keep up the good work. SoNNy
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes, aging is something we all deal with and as I get older, I'm in my mid-thirties, I find that state of mind has so much to do with accepting getting older and coming to understand that each new day is a day of promise and to never give up on youthful or any other dream.
I admire you for your honesty and fears and wish you a belated happy birthday~ remember we can grow old but never truly up!
Love,Peace,Joy & Graceful Aging!
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This is such an excellent piece about age. I agree with sickly, the title does speak volumes. You were so completly honest in this piece and it was nice to read from someone who has experienced more of life than the rest of us. Great job.
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by rockunsilenced | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow this is excellent! I love the two last stanzas, how you word it makes it stunning! The titel itself, appeals to me, it caught my attention! Great poem, Happy Belated birthday, I hope you have Fifty more! :)

| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]
  this pritty d**** good... i could how you put your genuwine concerns and fearsof aging into this poem... this poem was trully you.. and although i cannot know how it fell yet i can tell from this poem that its scaryy and uncontolable for you... thanks forposting this peice
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Versifier | [ Reply to This ]
The only word I can really say
This speaks so much to me
I can really feel like I know what you mean
when I read this
This is why life is so beautiful
No not aging and dying-
but having the moments that you still remember years back
The ones that make you smile every time you think of them
This is truly awesome
I bow my head, oixi
Big Bill-
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]

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