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    dots Submission Name: good-byedots

    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    altar bound
    sweet freedom
    save your strength
    this is my life
    and that's all it is
    why worry?
    spend the evening with me
    i sing of liberty
    to the woman of my heart
    and of returning to love
    floating in emotions
    never say die
    it's a sad situation
    we can talk it over
    don't forget
    you know it's true

    Submitted on 2005-06-22 13:42:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I really made me stop and think for a moment. Now that I think about it, my own crushes were like that. You captured the feeling perfectly. Congradulations. Probably my favorite line is, "floating in emotions" it is so true...so true...well, I'll stop rambling on if you promise to keep writing!

    Ever fathful;
    ~Ash Night~
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by AshNight | [ Reply to This ]
      hey sickly,
    wow is just about all i can say. I love it but did you just break up? if you did you have some serious emotions to fuel your writing with. Wow, again I mean I hardly ever date but from what I have seen it doesn't feel so good. Keep up the good work.
    ~much love~
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Imaginth | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very interesting definately, and "unconventional" is a word that also springs to mind.
    I quite liked it though, especially the kind of elusive freedom it expressed.
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]

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