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    dots Submission Name: Brokendots
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    Author: cherrypie
    ASL Info:    16/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 37/37/18
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 697
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    Description:
       things i have seen experienced or i know about other people. some phrases are in french. i would like to know what you think about it


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    dotsBrokendots
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    Hot tears fall onto her pillow
    Mocking the rain as it falls onto the window pane
    Burning blood runs down her leg
    The fresh cuts sting as the ceiling fan blows smoky air onto her open wounds
    Once again she stares out the window at the perfect life passing her by
    The dispersed black umbrellas reflect the pattern of specks upon her shirt left behind by scorching tears
    Her eyes dash to the blood covered razor as she brings her hand once again to her make-up smeared face
    Inhaling deeply she lets the smoke from her weed fill her lungs
    Her physical pain is easing but the pain in her mind only ravages
    "Une plus de fois" she says
    Picking up the razor she slides it across her leg one more time
    Feelings of pain and disgust crawl from her cut down her leg and creep onto the carpet
    The man returns from the bathroom buttoning his pants and straightening his shirt
    Pulling crumpled money from his pocket he throws ten dollars at her
    "Merci vous putain sale" he says
    He turns off the lights leaving her in her undying pain, perpetual darkness, and the hatred that lives eternal in her mind




    Submitted on 2005-06-22 22:31:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh my GOD! I really dont know what to say about that. It was more like a story then a poem. But because i know that didn't happen to you then i feel a whole lot better. It was to said. Happy thoughts.
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Brittany05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Uh. . I dont know where to begin. i felt there. I felt the pain of the blade against my leg. I could see the man coming from the bathroom. I could see the smoke from the weed. It was like you painted a picture, and it sucked me inside of it. Sort of like I was trapped and wondering hopelessly around seeing this happening. Or like i was my concious and i saw myself doing it. i saw it in a perspective that was truly amazing!
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]


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