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    dots Submission Name: an angeldots
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    Author: webdevil
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 113/105/43
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Passion
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    dotsan angeldots
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    To me
    you are the whispering winds
    the flowering of waters
    the laughter of birds
    and my angel
    that seeks
    my heart's love.




    Submitted on 2005-06-23 05:55:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like that sweet and short but meaning full, i understand and can relate just i wish i was someones angel i get the messge its beautiful
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very short and too the point. (Can birds really laugh?) This is very vague and kind of unoriginal. You definately get the message across, but you do it in a cliché sort of way. What makes your story different from anyone elses? That's what you need with this.

    Tragicly,
    Darin
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poem is like how I see myself. Very simple! I think you poem is great for what you are trying to show. I get the job done, but it makes me want to ask who what when where and how. This sounds like a famous love so perhaps you should make it a bright star.
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
      A limerick i suppose, nice to know that u write limericks, it promotes a single msg, in lines 3 maybe u anted to write 'flowing waters' but u had a typo there by writing flowering water, or do u mean to say the lilies? flow ur simplicity.
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by realpassion | [ Reply to This ]


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