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Author: realpassion
ASL Info:    27/Male/Nigeria
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 81 /70 /50
Words: 183
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Last wednesday we stole away
To the countryside,
To unearthen our treasure of gold.

Sturdy mountains in a silent clap
Cheered us welcomed whilst
Nature's horizon rubbed
On our skin glowing ointment
Of tender affections.

Quency's mild laughter married
Micah's romantic smiles
To reveal a picturesque sight.

Issues too numerous we discussed
With no intent to resurrect tension
Cos lips overlapped to suck soft
Breathe well-scented from our deepest
Caves; 'till neurons became offended;
Leaving to imaginations the power
Of mutual seduction.

Eyes saw two mortals performed
A love rite on the green field
Of houston;
Till the moon with radiant smiles
Awoke from her slumber...

Blood of his heart was love for her
And the elixir of eternal bond was tasted
By sheer chance as their infant sleep
Became a future reality...

Submitted on 2005-06-23 08:36:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey realpassion,
That was great. I did see the whole scene in my head. I do like that part about "picturesque sight." I used picturesque as one of my vocab words one time. It brings back memories!
~much love~
| Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Imaginth | [ Reply to This ]

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