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    dots Submission Name: The Final Restdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       On the death of a friend of mine. She died last night. She was fighting the disease, Lupus. It looked like she was getting better. She was six. I was her world. I coached her tumbling/ gymnastics class, was her sister in spirit, her mother,. I will miss her.


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    Last night, you took your final rest,
    lowered into your own bleak tomb,
    so young, so sweet, so true,
    But in the end you met your doom.

    You're only six, not that old,
    Full of light and childish innocence,
    But in the end the sickness to its toll,
    The hurt should have been foretold.

    So, my angel, you're far away,
    In a place where people never lie,
    You memeory of happiness will live,
    I promise I won't let them die.

    I will always miss you,
    But I know you're happier up there,
    No disease to bring you down,
    God will treat you fair.

    Goodbye, my Natalie, my hope,
    I'll always remember your smile,
    Long will your image live in me,
    The laughing child, who only stayed a while.




    Submitted on 2005-06-23 11:03:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a very good poem.I definatly know what it's like to deal with someone's death.If you read the poem of mine,'It Happend By Night',it goes along the lines of this.Only,in mine losing my grandfather of age 62.I'm sorry and hope you feel better.Awesome.
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't even imagine losing a child. A child that never got to finish vdeveloing into a woman. That has to be painful to anyone that was involved in her life. This is sad. Even makes a grown brotha like me want to cry.

    Excellent work.

    Dialo
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Xtremebiter | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Persephone,
    I really know how you feel to lose someone so dear to you. When I was about three years old I met this girl and we were friends until I was nine. Then she was taken away by some men neither of us knew. I later found out four years later she was kidnapped and murdered. No one could find her or identify her until they found our friendship bracelets(a tear falls). I lost her forever and never there passed a day where I dont think about her.
    Keep Writing and keep your spirits up!
    ~much love~
    Imaginth
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Imaginth | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh that made me cry, you made the sweetest but saddest poem. The girl sounds very sweet! I love the poem, and the genuine feelings you put in it. I hope you will be able to heal from your loss! you're in my prayers! goodp oem!

    **I.N.D.E.L.I.B.L.E._I.N.K**
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]
      Your message touched me. Your passion and conviction to see this through taught me about compassion.

    Your loss has made an empty hole in our hearts. We grieve with you on your loss.

    I will pray for you and the famaly. You were very close to this young girl and now she is gone. I don't think there is much I can say. Except she is at peace and with God.

    Take heart for God will retuen and there will be the day you will see her again. Hang in there, if you need moral support I am always here.

    Hang in there.
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]


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