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    dots Submission Name: The love of hate.dots
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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       I fukking hate steven. He can go to fukkin hell. He played games with me for far too long. And so now Im gonna be the one to fukkin ripe his heart out.


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    dotsThe love of hate.dots
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    Iím on my knees,
    Come on grab me,
    Iím standing here waiting for you,
    Reach down and feel me,
    Take my hand,
    Please walk with me,

    Wow, Iím not sure I like this,
    Is this only a game to you?
    Tell me you love me,
    Leave me here waiting,
    On my knees pleading,
    Not wanting to let go,
    But youíre not only the thing I love,
    You exactly what I hate.




    Submitted on 2005-06-23 11:11:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know exactly how you feel. Trust me, guys can be total jerks. Your poem gets that point across in a totally sincere way. As far as it goes go ahead and make him pay for it.
    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      Hate to love...love to hate. Both of them words are exact opposites yet belong together. How ironic is that?

    I think out of the whole dictionary, those are the most controversial words.

    Great write. You shared pure feelings. I could feel it.

    Dialo
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Xtremebiter | [ Reply to This ]
      this seem like you have expereinced with the narator of this poem as if you were her/him... i must admit thisisnt exactly pulitzer material but i like it andits strong emotion and how you put ur herat and soul into the poem ... thanks for posting
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Versifier | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know if I can go and give you advice on dating and guys, because I am one myself =X
    But I will say,
    The last lines are weird
    because you hate someone and love them at the same time which implies a paradox
    Another minor thing
    in the first stanza,
    "Come on grab me,"
    should be-
    "Come on, grab me
    Just my opinion
    You know I'm a fan of your work thinking,
    Best of Luck
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's sincerely and simply stated; raw emotion. You never know whether to love those relationships for making you stronger or to hate them for wasting time. I like the love & hate contrast.
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by literary lover | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey it seems like this guy was a total jerk to you. I hope that you start to recover more or less. I don't really date and the poems that really tell me not to get attached are worth reading. Your poem was amazing. I felt kinda stuck to anger. I got a little confused when you were like on your knees. Were you begging him not to leave? Keep writing!
    ~much love~
    Imaginth
    ps~much love is what i always say it can also be support from a family member or a good friend!
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Imaginth | [ Reply to This ]


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