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The FF on the VCR


Author: Malcolm Bishop
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In the routine rush of life, it can be easy to overlook...life.


The FF on the VCR



Blurs of humanity shoot by as bullets,
holding on for dear life my knuckles are white.

OH WHAT A RIDE

Tears streak my temples as the wind pounds,
the speed of this .45 caliber life confounds.

OH WHAT A RIDE

I can see those entities as if on a rollercoaster,
their arms raised, mouths open in screams.

OH WHAT A RIDE

The rush in my ears is at a deafening tone,
I can hear everything and nothing at once.

OH WHAT A RIDE

With the chaos that cocoons me, I am birthed,
born into silence, a peace finally abounds.

OH WHAT A RIDE

Turning my head I see all that there is,
with this stillness I see all.

OH WHAT A SIDE




Submitted on 2005-06-23 14:40:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well I can honestly say I never would have thought of this idea. It seems the older I get the faster life passes me by,but, if I should check out tomorrow I can say, Oh What I Ride I've had!
I like this poem a lot and it is very interesting.
!Doc`
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  It does seem that life is in "fast forward" at times doesn't it? Sometimes I myself, feel as if the earth is spinning, everyone going about at highspeed.. and I'm just standing still. That's what this reminds me of. You have an interesting way of putting your thoughts out there. I enjoyed reading this.
Peace and Joy to You,
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  You know, this would make an excellent song. I could almost hear the deep sound of the bass, the manic drums. Reading this piece actually left me dizzy! I loved that stanza:

"With the chaos that cocoons me, I am birthed,
born into silence, a peace finally abounds."

Everything you wrote had a certain sense of truth to it, and for that I applaud you.
| Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Pina Colada | [ Reply to This ]
  I like how the title gives you an idea of how you see this poem going. As if you were pressing fast forward on your vcr and thats what you saw and wrote of. Then again, it was just an apt title for this piece.

Very descriptive, nice fast pace to this. An original take on things. Well done.

Oh, just two little typos I spotted -
deafining - deafening
and entitys - entities.

Apart from that, it was an entertaining read. Cheers
| Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this a lot...The piece is directly vague, the concept of fasting forward while trying to hold onto the moment...The ending of the poem OH WHAT A SIDE indicates that you are going to flip it over like a cassette and keep the ride going...Kudos.
B
| Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by bluepifany | [ Reply to This ]


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