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    dots Submission Name: Willow Treedots
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    Author: VanillaLeaves
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 101/110/23
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       this poem was based off of Anne Sexton's poem "Lobster." It uses the same format and structure.


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    dotsWillow Treedots
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    A handful of broken fingers,
    a piece of Demeter&#8217;s crown,
    the willow tree mumbles to the wind and water
    an old woman lost in a storm,
    gathering the melodies of graying sand
    until gradually the wind wears her down
    admitting ants to crawl beneath her skin.
    Somewhere a child embraces a maple tree,
    allowing the sap to anoint her face,
    Somewhere blind mystics read the secrets
    inscribed in the bark of oaks,
    Somewhere pine trees chant
    in a rustling of perfume soaked needles.
    Of this the willow knows nothing
    she is a sage of lake and wind,
    a hermit on a barren shore
    who, as the world erodes her
    inside and outside, will fall
    one with her lake
    one with her wind
    as wood and leaves become
    a translucent film on the sea of eternity.




    Submitted on 2005-06-23 16:49:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was lovely!
    Beautiful and affecting imagery. It seemed to speak of loneliness and isolation. Unsung and unappreciated beauty. But yet perhaps secure in it's natural environs.

    Well, anyway it was a wonerful write! :)

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful imagrey.. we need more nature poems at this site. I only have one suggestion- fix the 2nd line.. I think it shd be an apostrophe instead. Otherwise keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that was a really good nature poem. I don't rad a lot of nature, but that was really good. I've never read anne sexton's poetry, but it sounds like a good read. your words were enchanting, that really got me going, Excellent piece of work, I hope to see you post more of your poetry!

    **I.N.D.E.L.I.B.L.E._I.N.K.**
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok for the first thing. It had some grammer errors. But that happens to the best of us. Another thing. I am kinda confused here. But oh well. The auther always holds the true knowledge. Who am I to judge your ideas.
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Emily, this turned out a lot sadder than I had expected, almost signifying the fragility of ourselves and the inevitability of death.
    I don't know if you meant this, but I also see the diversification of the human race depicted in the different trees you write of, each with its own purpose and reason for existence.
    I also saw the death of the willow and the "rebirth" as the young child embraces the maple.
    Maybe I read too much into it, but that's not a bad thing, either.
    Great poem
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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