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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 695
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 681



    Description:
       Not a common metaphor but I think one to which we can all relate.

    I am a fan of Rumi and Hafez. They both have referenced donkey f*rts in their work. This poem may break some wind but it is not breaking any new ground.

    We all have an eleven year old stuck somewhere inside of us. It is OK to giggle at this.

    I hope you enjoy it.


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    Milk of human kindness
    with lactose intolerance:
    lack of social tolerance
    stinks.

    It may be hard
    to accept and digest,
    but don't blame them
    for your internal rumbling.
    There are those that dine
    and delight on difference.

    If you can't stomach it
    it is not their problem
    until you release
    loud rudeness in response
    to their natural nature.

    Please don't do it here.
    People will look at you
    with twisted faces
    and turn away their noses
    because it smells atrocious
    and they all know
    who did it.




    Submitted on 2005-06-24 06:46:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love your opening lines! Some people just cannot digest difference in others. I am certainly one who delights in all the different colours of my fellow creatures. It is what makes this world so beautiful and interesting.

    Thanks for the giggle!

    +Jo
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by whisperslove | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL! I loved that! I can just imagine someone letting one rip in public...with all of those uptight ladies in their fancy hats...yeah! Anyway, I really don't see anything wrong with it...the grammer and spelling is mostly OK. Here is the only thing, you are supposed to have a punctuation mark at the end of everyline, be it comma, semicolon...yeah. On a couple of lines you didn't have a punctuation mark. But that's all!

    always longing;
    ~Ash Night~
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by AshNight | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh! This was a funny and witty poem. You have a lot of hillarious lines in the poem. I especially like the first verse. I liked how you wrote your poem in a way of telling people that someone had "let out gas" without really saying it. Ah, a little advice, remember to capitalize every sentence. Other than that, I thought this was a truley clever poem. ^_^


    -Segniust
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Segniust | [ Reply to This ]
      LoL

    I loved this
    I am one who truly loves a poem written with humor in mind
    I have trouble writing with humor but I am working on this
    A very clever write
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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