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    Author: poetsoul
    ASL Info:    17/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 109/151/32
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 800
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    it doesnt hurt anymore,
    i promise.
    im sick of it gentle,
    i want it rough
    make me scream!!
    here, i'll climb on top,
    i heard it goes in deeper inside.
    thats what i want,
    fill me, feel me.
    mmmmmm the first stroke is the best.
    ok,now its starting to hurt, i lied.
    keep going, faster..deeper!
    i find your rythm and match it,
    while digging my nails into your back.
    is that blood i see?
    i'll losen my grip.
    why did you you stop?
    oh........nevermind.
    the reasons running down my thigh.
    that was quick....but good.
    i think i'll stick to gentle




    Submitted on 2005-06-24 08:40:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well that was interesting but i like it...very unique and it's totally honest !even if it's a little rough around the edges.
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by pandora22 | [ Reply to This ]
      ...interesting! very interesting! i liked it! very extraordinary way of expressing your feelings! i had to read it a couple times to reallt understand it! i liked it! kep it interesting! good write! Shady
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was more like a description of something than a poem itself
    Though I hear this is true too
    I don't think it's a poem at all
    More of a commentary
    Or something.
    Lol, I hear you though
    You like it rough
    I got ya
    Big Bill Sinclaire.
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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