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    dots Submission Name: Endless Farewellsdots
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    Author: Dipsomniac
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 59/70/18
    Words: 471
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsEndless Farewellsdots
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    On a sweet summer day rain falls like tears
    Sweep away our bad times, hide behind our fears
    As not to forget what we once were
    And in hopes a new love will reassure
    That in company of strangers
    You can be that which you wish
    Leave yourself behind, lost in dangers
    No more than strangers in the shadows
    Like rainy days we never miss
    While fire takes away flowering meadows

    Donít think of the day to be gone
    When all that once was is done
    Donít dwell on what was wrong
    You messed up, youíre not the only one

    Together we flew to where the sea kisses the moon
    Thereís something sacred about the month of June
    Maybe itís the way I never played fair
    Maybe itís the color of your hair
    But no matter what, a silent prayer rises up
    A wish to live on wingless dreams
    Father, take from me this cup, I cannot bare
    To see you walk away so quickly
    And to take with you a piece of me
    If you must, take it to infinity
    Where itíll be frozen on a silver sea
    Reassuring the remembrance of me

    Donít think of the day to be gone
    When all that once was is done
    Donít dwell on what was wrong
    You messed up, youíre not the only one

    And on that same day heíll be crying
    For the love that she saw dying
    On a cold rainy day
    When all my debts were payed

    Oh my friend, itís time to sail away
    Not one minute lost on our long way
    ďFriends are foreverĒ
    Like a rose stays red till winter
    When snow brings itís icy chill
    And burns itís holes against our will

    Today the sky is painted crimson and blue
    Reflection of rays released by you
    Seeming to bend all what I see
    Till all I see is me
    What islands are to planets
    Is what you are to me
    Youíre just my bad habit
    Waiting to be broken
    Lies are the words Iíve spoken

    I love a girl in red
    Walking to me, a scarlet thread
    Her eyes are dark like chocolate
    Makes all my thoughts go round in my head
    Stopping to remember how she smelled
    I really love her oh so well
    Stopping and knocking on the open door
    I couldn't see that her heart I held

    Don't believe this dying soul
    Dark souled man with poisoned wells
    Digging his own grave, a gaping hole
    Saying his last, endless farewells.

    Forget all these last lines
    Merely nonsense rhymes
    Reality check time
    I love you to death
    I love your hair and your eyes
    I love how you ignore me
    Try and hypnotize me
    And it works so well, so well




    Submitted on 2005-06-24 21:03:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was beautiful. you used very descriptive words that painted a great picture. and then the ending freakin rocked. like all the doubts and thoughts were just thrown out the window. and i liked that sooo much. it was great.

    Cat
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by dancer06 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that was so beautiful, I'm a fan of lengthy poetry. I think your able to put more meaning into it, and it's like being enratured in a fairy tale. The ending almost hypnotized me:

    Forget all these last lines
    Merely nonsense rhymes
    Reality check time
    I love you to death
    I love your hair and your eyes
    I love how you ignore me
    Try and hypnotize me
    And it works so well, so well

    This was kind of surprising to me, but it was a really good ending, I love endings, I usually compliment on the good ones! Nice job! :

    **I.N.D.E.L.I.B.L.E._I.N.K.**
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]


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