Tea party? and I wasn't invited?? This is a lovely poem.. reminds me of my young-girl days. And I don't know why but it also reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland". And has the echo of the phrase "don't cry over spilt milk"...and a "who dunnit"...all wrapped up in one. Very nice! ~Sandra
You know, at a certain glance, it does appear simple. But, really… you were able to bring in to light the innocence of being a child. The ability to brush aside things grown ups can’t and the innocuous way of going through life with a single digit age.
I have a few issues with this piece though…
It is a bit messy.
“And found ourselves is separate corners” I think should be… “And found ourselves in separate corners”
“But noone would admit to the crime” should be “But none would admit to the crime.”
A simple little didy that I like. I think that some spelling edits and some coherance in time and sapce would imrove the piece. Yet even with its simplicity, I feel like it could delve into more the idea of childish longing, and that of adult blame. Just some thoughts... AShley