I felt like I understood this one for some reason, and I liked it. It made sense without having to make sense...maybe that didn't make sense...anyways, everybody kind of makes the world their own, you know? the world and everything in it looks different to everyone else. There are a few spelling mistakes, and I don't know what a chimmer is, but it's good. I luved, and I will add it to my faves list! Please keep writing, I would love to see more of your work!
I like this. I prefer my own world, as I make it, to the bitter one we live in. I love the images this piece entices, I love imaginary worlds. I don't know what else to say. There were some spelling errors but nothing too bad. This was deffinately a change from the poetry I have been reading. It seemed light heart, until you dug to the core. I admire that about this piece, the exterior happy and fun, the interior deep and meaningful.
This is good Francis. I have to agree with Big Bill, it needs work, but so does the world. I'm not a fan of the ogers and dwarfs and things like that, just ask anyone, but you did a good job, just work on it a bit.
I liked this Gothik, It was creative at least Good wording I suppose, But it had some flaws, And I'm going to be honest about them- 1 - Don't rhyme down with down 2 - "while dragons friendly drinks whiskey" Should be drink , if that's what you mean 3 - "and mermaids just flys away" It sounds like the narrator was drunk when he was speaking this poem. lol should be "and mermaids just fly away" you used chimmers at first, and then said chimers I have never heard of this word. Call me stupid, but PM me with the definition Overall it needs work, But has potential for an abstract write Hopefully you keep writing, because a new face is always welcome here. Big Bill-
He he, I really loved this. Who knows if what we belive to be real is just our dreams or if dreams are reality.. LOL, sorry, I'm in a strange mood right now. I really liked this, hope you keep on posting here ^__^