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Author:	SHRINKSDR
Elite Ratio:	4.28 - 466/363/33
Words:	249

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Fathers' Day is one of the few times my three daughters are togeher. Two older daughters from my first marriage and my youngest who just finished her first year of college from my present marriage. Due to circumstances, I will not go into, it has been difficult for the two older to have a relationship with my youngeest daughter although they very much want this. So it is always specially sweet when they are together.

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Fathers Day ‘05

There they sit –
Out door café in Manhattan.
Oldest daughter arranged this day.
The three of them together,
My three girls!
A special treat –
Two marriages,
Nasty divorce - has
Made this confluence
Of three angels together
Rare.

Chatting,
Laughing,
As only girls do.
Surrounding me with
Curly hair,
Curly smiles,
Shiny eyes.

Their essence swirls around me
Like some sweet
Intoxicating incense.
I’m high!
High on them.

I sit and watch.
It’s my day,
But what makes my day
Is their love for each other.

My heart swells,
As does my chest!

I fret, worry, wonder,
Have I given enough?
Been there enough?
Been Father enough?
Been Man enough?

My own, now passed, father comes to mind.
Is he here with us today?
He would adore these three.
Never saw first one born.

He could be difficult, distant
Quick to anger.
Yet I adored and loved him.

My eyes are wet.
In ways I have been better with my girls
Than he was with me.
Yet I loved him!
Do I deserve less?
Perhaps not.

Here before my eyes,
The
Sum and total of my life!

If these three lovely souls
Are what I leave behind,
My life is complete.
My work here is done.

My day is over.
Hugs, kisses, smiles and
Goodbyes
I will not forget this day!

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  What a special Father's Day for you!
To be able, in spite of divorces, to have a day with those closes to your heart (your children) together, with no anger, bitterness or hate; but pure sweet love between a Father and his Ladies is priceless. A bond not to be broken...I am glad that you were able to have such a wonderful Father's Day in 2005 and that you and your girls are so close...

Smiles and laughter
~Linda
| Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Very well written
I loved this
I did not have a very good relationship with my Dad as I always blamed him for there divorce
It was until about 5 years ago that I realized how important this man is to me
Today I live with him helping him to overcome a depression
Something I know a LOT about
Take Care
and
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  How very moving to read this delightful piece. Your girls should read this.. they would be thrilled I'm sure, to read the thoughts you've written here.
It reminds me of this past Mother's Day.. I had some of the same feelings as I watched my 4 children all get together and prepare me a meal.. give me flowers..and most of all..their love. It was a delight (just as this poem) to soak in the moment.

And, as you've stated so wonderfully..

"If these lovely souls
Are what I leave behind
My life is complete.
My work here is done."

A beautiful piece.. I enjoyed it thoroughly.

~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a terrific piece or work. Your feelings clearly shine through without being too maudlin. Loved the lines:

Do I deserve less?
Perhaps not.

The crux of everything in those 2 short sentences. Not having gone through a divorce I can only imagine what some of these feelings are like, but I can certainly relate.

Peace,

Joey
| Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
  this piece brought me close to tears, because being a daughter, i've never thought of a fathers view of fathers day. and also the way you convey to the reader such a powerful feeling, the love you have towards your daughters. amazing.
| Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
  hello steve ,
thought i'd stop by and check out fathers day as you mentioned and i'm so pleased you advised ne too , as it is a beautiful piece not only about how you are a father but also about your father , it spills over with the love and pride you have for your 3 lovely daughters , and i know they just as proud of you as you of them.
take care Lainie
| Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this was beautiful. It reminded me of my parents divorce, and how life went when my real-mom had kids with my step-dad. My sister and I were pretty young at the time, but we slowly adjusted to the fact that we know had younger brothers. Since we only got to see them every second week for a week, our relationship with them wasn't very good, and this poem reminded me of that. In your description you said, "it has been difficult for the two older to have a relationship with my youngest daughter although they very much want this". That is what is has been like for my sister and I, (especially my sister).

As usual, the form and everything else was really good. Great job, you're doing really good.
~Kriss
| Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked this. it was alot more personal. on a different level.
it was all of your feelings brought into this piece.
it reminds me of my last post. alot of people didnt really like it because it didnt seem like poetry to them.
but i really like this alot.
it was very powerful and really showed your feelings and emotions on such an important day.
i think that this was all you.
it was a style, topic and feeling all your own.
i loved it.

"Yet I adored and loved him.
My eyes are wet.
In ways I have been better with my girls
Than he with me.
Yet I loved him!
Do I deserve less?
Perhaps not.

They are the
Sum and total of my life
Here before me
I am well pleased
If these lovely souls are what I leave behind
I will die a happy man."

really great-
jennifer
| Posted on 2005-06-26 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
  Really nice.

I wrote a Father's day bit this year myself, and I see comparisons between the two. I'm at a different point in my life; my sons are still little boys and my father is still living. Still, I lost my mom last spring and I think I can identify with your feelings about your father. Father's day, to me, is about love, but for some reason it's the one holiday that really makes me realize how much I'm loved, personally.

This same feeling comes through in your work. you look at your daughters and see the future. You obviously love them and you're proud od how they've grown. They love you and that's what Father's Day is all about.

Happy Father's Day (a bit belated)

Steve
| Posted on 2005-06-26 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
  Awww... reminds me of my dad with me and my sisters. I agree that some parts were a bit confusing, but I got it after a few reads, My favorite part was this one:

Their essence swirls around me
Like some sweet
Intoxicating incense
I’m high!
High on them.

It was just worded so well, and very cute! It's one of those things you can't help but smile at! Thanks for posting another poem! :)

**I.N.D.E.L.I.B.L.E._I.N.K.**
| Posted on 2005-06-25 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]
  The format on this was -weird-
Maybe that's why it wasn't my favorite
I mean, you picked an interesting topic
And you told me what I needed to know
But I didn't have to work for it
And some parts were slightly confusing
Well not so much confusing, as they were poorly written.
Sorry to be so harsh lol
It's not like I entirely didn't like the poem
There were a few spots where the meaning shone through.
Just go back and read over it.
You'll see what I mean.
Good Job,
Big Bill-
| Posted on 2005-06-25 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, well...I found one I hadn't read and so glad I did! This is just beautiful! How wonderfully you have captured this fathers day and the scene and the emotions all wrapped up in a great write! The love you have for your 3 daughters is quite obvious and very special indeed! This day with them meant the world to you and it must have been so hard to see it come to an end! I dont have any children but I do know about goodbyes and boy are they tough! I like too, how you analyze your father and your relationship with him and how you are with your daughters (but that is just second nature to you though huh) This is a great poem! So wonderfully written! Take care!

Lorna
| Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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