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    dots Submission Name: Pretenddots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Let's drive out of this town
    there's surely a better place.
    We only need each other.
    Let's dump the load of emotions
    we've carried for so long.
    All we need to feel
    we can give to each other,
    and we can burn all of our possessions
    and pretend we're different people
    who have our faces
    and have our names.

    Submitted on 2004-04-09 23:34:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the contradiction in this (if there is one intended)... being together yet pretending we're not who we are when we found each other. interesting.
    | Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write, i have always wanted to just let go of everything around me, grab up my best friend and haul ass out of this place. Forget everything, leave it behind and have no worries except about what little resturant we'll stop at for breakfast. I love it. ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-10 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem! Sometimes I feel the same i just want to be someone else somewhere else, to just get away from the probs of the world and my life. Keep writting with this much emotion and could make it far someday!!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-10 00:00:00 | by Spankey | [ Reply to This ]

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