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    dots Submission Name: His Secretdots

    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 763
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       I recently dug up my old poetry book from a few years ago.

    I don't know why I bother posting up my old poetry, since I am a completely different person now...it's wondous the maturing, growing, pain, and life lesson a person can experience within 2 years. so i don't truly understand why i want to post old poems; but I have a few theories

    maybe it's the need to show improvement. to show my (hopefully) progressed writing

    or perhaps it's the difference seen when comparing my old writing to my newer ones, showing two completely different point of viws from two completely different people

    or, maybe, i just still like it

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHis Secretdots

    Don't worry, I'll never tell
    That you don't want to be pulled up from where you fell
    Enchanted, enraptured, under her spell
    And you fall into her eyes
    Empty brown wells

    Shhh! It's a secret! I promise I won't tell
    While every day you love her
    Every day is hell
    I'll make sure to toughen up my invincible shell
    But, God, the price I'd pay for the love you won't sell

    Keep QUIET! It's a secret okay?
    Don't worry, ill take the secret to my grave
    I want to rescue you, but you don't want to be saved
    The path I walk alone with grief and longing is paved
    With the choices that my damn heart has made

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      this poem confused me, uterly confusing, yet i liked it.. but i dont quite get the whole concept of this poem. but i still thought it was good
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by star_on_fire22 | [ Reply to This ]
      something about it touhed me. it was simpal and easy to read but its still makes you feel and at first i thought that it was a bit "young" i ended up feeling like it was an all your life think some lines i loved were you put them and how the feel becuz of that like: But, God, the price I'd pay for the love you won't sell
    Keep QUIET! It's a secret okay?
    Don't worry, ill take the secret to my grave
    I want to rescue you, but you don't want to be saved that was great and i also loved your into the first 5 lines but i thnk that you may want to think about changeing the line :Shhh! It's a secret! I promise I won't tell, becuz the wont tell feels to much like the first line well no it feels over said cuz the hole poem is in that tone. but i did injoy it. thanks
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by BlackLace | [ Reply to This ]

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