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Andrew's Poem

Author: lenotoire
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The other day my 10 year old son came in the house from playing outside and said, mom, I'm gonna write a poem. Well, this is what he wrote.

I read this and thought it was the sweetest thing, and I had to post this for all to read (with a little editing on punctuation and spelling, but absolutely no changes to the words).

I don't think he is finished with this, I sure hope he isn't. I am dying to see how it ends.

Andrew's Poem


No matter how small you are,
you can still be a star.
Or how nice, or mean, and even bizarre
you can accomplish great things,
without being known by everyone.
You may be able to be a wrestler
and lift a ton.

Andrew J. Budnik

Submitted on 2005-06-26 21:57:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Aww, he's got his mother's talent for words. I've read some of your other poems and my favorite is 'Angels Do Exist'. I hope he always thinks this way, because there's nothing in the world you can't be if you want it enough... and I hope he goes far in life
| Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ]
  Whether he adds anything more to the poem, we must sincerely hope that he is never finished with the thought! He sounds delightful, and as talented perhaps as his mother! Thanks for sharing. mae
| Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]
  awesome the "no matter how small you are you can be a star" that is so wonderfully put. just those first two lines are the heart of altruism, the unselfish concern for others. With your encouragement Andrew will be a rising star in his own right. the accomplishments that people do without being known is another mind boggling statement, I'm blown away. the last two lines ca be literal and yet it also gives the hint of a lesson as well that no matter how tough things may get one can excel. this is so beautiful truly a divine piece. sincerely respectfully and with all encouragement for Andrew to keep on writing, mike :)
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is SO cool!

There'a a lot of wisdom in the ten year old mind. Hopefully he remembers this message, because right now, he understands everything he need to know about getting through life.

Thanks for sharing,
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh wow....

I sincerely hope that he isnt, in fact, finished with this - but even more I hope that he never forgets this...and as he grows, he will always remember those words he wrote, and takes them with him, as his motto, everywhere he chooses to go in life....

So many are disheartened and put off their goals by circumstances, responsibilities and what have you, but this jsut speaks of a passion for life, and to realise that at the age of 10 is just fantastic....

You must be so proud of him

All the best,

| Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by Katia | [ Reply to This ]
  'No matter how small you are,
you can still be a star.'

'you can accomplish great things,
without being known by everyone'

These four lines struck me for the sheer wisdom I saw in it. It's great poetry, and coming from a ten year old, that's like whoa, amazing.

Yea, I agree with Ashley, your son's gonna be coming up with some great stuff later on if you nurture it now.

It was a really sweet poem. I hope you rewarded him with ice-cream for writing something so beautiful and pure lol.

And it was sweet of you for sharing it with us. I'm sure you must be a proud momma. Cheers
| Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow...keep an eye on this kid, he's gonna have some strong feeling once puberty hits. he's obviously wise beyond his years. I'm sure a lot of this came from his mother, should he finish it, I'd love to hear the end, but considering his age, endings are highly unlikely, there are too manybeginnings to explore...
| Posted on 2005-06-26 00:00:00 | by queendepricate | [ Reply to This ]

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