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    dots Submission Name: Beginningdots
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    Author: hammyj
    ASL Info:    21/m/Notts UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 130/81/21
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Bytes: 838



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       This is just something I have been thinking about after someone closeto me passing away
    Let me know what you think/feel etc.
    Thanks for reading


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    In The Beginning there was heaven and earth
    We still have that
    There was also night and day
    We still have this
    There was then sky and water
    We still have these
    And there was land and plants and trees
    They’re all still here
    There was seasons and stars
    These are ever changing but still there
    There were birds and creatures and beasts
    These are still here
    And finally there was Man
    Some of us are still here

    In our End there will be heaven and earth
    There will also be night and day
    And sky and water
    With land, plants and trees.
    There will be seasons and stars
    And birds, creatures and beasts
    But especially there will be Man

    Why can't this be only the Beginning.




    Submitted on 2005-06-27 04:15:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this it get you thinking on the point that we all get these wonderful things at are beging. But then at are end we lose them, and someone else comes along and get to have them. I like it got me thinking on what i have and what i dont want to lose and what i could leave for someone eles at the end. Very deep like it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Cokesu | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats a very deep thinking poem and quite inspirational. It is very pensive and thats good. Found it a bit hard to read the first time but I got the message and went back to read again. I think it was the structure that threw me.
    I really liked it though.
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by Hidden_depths | [ Reply to This ]


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