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    dots Submission Name: Lifedots
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    Author: Ramneet
    ASL Info:    33/F/Boston
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 269/107/54
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Deep ocean,the life.
    The sole survivor,the human being.
    The greatest creation of the Divine.




    Submitted on 2005-06-27 10:12:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm...if the deep ocean mysterious wit all that depth,regions where the sun never touches,aqua life bearing lanterns,the pletora of events activities occurin in the ocean is enough to make u watch wit awe, like life various customs races traditions habits,philosophies ,life is that deep ocean from the surface u cant see d depths,only when u are born exist canu attempt at understandin life, i always say life is deep,and differences are endless intellectual,political,third world,appreciation for whats pure, the arts ,sciences, and considering man as exalted by a divine being, well if we werent we are now,just look aroun you, this piece is a thoght prompter an exercise for a deep thinker,i love it, pls let me know tho if i have over thinked on this one,lol
    | Posted on 2011-04-12 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      Created in his own image, we frail and imperfect human beings strive to live up to the image given us with less than perfect results....
    | Posted on 2011-04-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      My friend this could really turn into an incredible write
    I too have a deep love for the beautiful mysterious Ocean
    I really like how this one made me draw my own conclusions as to what you were referring the ocean to
    Very Nicely done
    If you dont mine and If you would like to add to this I would love to combine brains with you on this
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      There's so much I want to read into this, but my brain wants to ask more questions than give opinions.

    Is the human being the Divine's greatest creation, or is it the ocean with us, somehow, the sole survivor? Is deep ocean literally the life, or are you referencing the quagmire humans have made of daily life?

    I guess, I personally, need a bit more to be able to flesh this out in my own mind. You have me intrigued, but you have left me a bit befuddled.

    Maybe a second stanza that works in unison with the first?...

    Looking forward to more,
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      well, it's a start, just a start...I mean yeah-you're right life is exactly what you say but it's also so much more...I just think you should expand the meaning of life...but good start.
    -stacey-
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]


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