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Soul Mate


Author: Ramneet
ASL Info:    33/F/Boston
Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 272 /107 /55
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Soul Mate



Two souls wandering alone,
Looking for someone somewhere,
in their own ways,
on their own paths
with their own dreams,hopes and aspirations.

His wish,merged us into ONE,
to be each others,
Love,strength and confidence.
For the whole time and whole life.

My dear,we will together make the world a wonderful place to live in,
by being in it,
by being for each other,
now and always.




Submitted on 2005-06-27 10:16:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  We all want to find our soulmate I hope you found yours and are happy I think I have found mine but he is dating someone else at the moment
| Posted on 2012-04-22 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
  im glad you and your soul mate made a happy life for eachother....
the pain though i warn you when one of you die will be unbareable, i hope you never lose your soul mate

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| Posted on 2011-03-26 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
  We all search for a soulmate, but precious few of us ever find one. Joy is multiplied when it is shared, and life is easier with a friend to share it with.

Nice write!
| Posted on 2011-03-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm, i like this.
To me, the first stanza really isnt a waste.
In fact, the first stanza gives me the feeling of 2 very different people, perhaps not so different as personality, but in other things.
And then the rest of the poem unites them together, despite their different destinies.
I like it, i really do.
Great job.

It does kinda feel like there's no true ending to this.
The last stanza doesnt seem proper for a closing stanza.
Perhaps add more?
that would be great if you could express Love like this for a final stanza =]
| Posted on 2009-04-13 00:00:00 | by Sonson888 | [ Reply to This ]
  I am not really going to go way into this,. My only suggestion is that you reconsider having the first stanza at all. It does seem like it is only filling up space, and is rather obvious. The focus is on the meeting, not the beforehand, and by letting go of the first stanza, you will get an even greater focus.

Best,
-tZar
| Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by tZar | [ Reply to This ]
  I, of all people, probably shouldn't comment on a piece entitled 'Soul Mate' for I've struggled with wondering if there truly is just one person, a soulmate, for each of us...
This is a sweet piece full of loving emotion. This is one of the 'short & sweet' pieces where someone simply lays their feelings out there for all to read. Nicely done.
:)
~Tonya
| Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey,
Soul mate is always a topic that we might never understand but believe in. Wrote something like that. It has the same name you got on right now. Wrote a bit longer than you but still you got something going on here. Love is so wonderful when you get the opportunity to meet it. I know i did. Did you?

The best part was the first two lines:
"Two souls wandering alone,
Looking for someone somewhere"

Kinda makes you feel that there is that someone who is looking out for you.

The nest two lines are repetitive and didn't really add any more effect to it but still, i'm okay with it. Don't really get why the last line is so long compared to the others, like you were trying to get all those last parts in. Makes not much sense. Take you time, don't give us too much information to swallow in one line.

The last stanza, not bad, but still it feels like there is no ending. Now and always. That's too vague. Put some more heart into it. This person is suppose to be your soul mate. Don't just say now and always. But if that's how you say it, okay. No biggy.

It's a really nice heart felt poem that anyone can take to heart and understand where you are coming from. Liked it very much. Thanks for sharing.

If you want, you can read mine. If that's okay with you. Other than that. Peace...Hope to hear from you soon...
Irina
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]


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