Description: I wrote this a while back and everytime I read it, I just....think. What do you think?
I want to know how it feels
To just be free
To not care about how much eyeliner I wear or
How people label me
I want to run in a field of daisies
And put some in my hair
I want to stop
and watch the ocean
Drop into thin air
I don't want to think about it
I don't need someone to tell me
How my life needs construction
how I need family.
I don't need to dream about rainbows
or scream everytime i have a nightmare.
I just need to be needed
I need to not care.
" I just need to be needed and need not to care" Great line I think Peop,e will always label you but if you force people to look beyond a label , they will have to put you in a catagory all of your own.
This is great, and so is the topic. So many people can relate to the feeling of just wanting to go somewhere where they can be free, just to get away from everything. You got the feelings and the meaning out just right. Good job ~Kriss
i kno what your also talking about.I dream every day of my life surviving that long that i can swim in the ocean and smell the roses and dasies.i love your peom.., i hope theres hope for us out there.keep writing
Ah, yes...the utopia of a purely spiritual world...I have also dreamed of it, and that's it. You only can dream of it... A very nice poem...but I am wondering why you breaked the rhythm in the middle of the poem. From the 5th to the 8th line - perfect syllable count, and then you hashed it into peaces...if you want to write a poem with no determined rhythm, that's your choice, but mixing poetry and prose just throws the readers off a little...at least it threw me off. But anyways, you have good ideas...keep thinking them up!
Great poem! I think alot of people want to be free. I tend to be labled and wish I could just be..."me". This is a good peice athough it seemed a little short, imcomeplete some how. But still I loved it. Great job!
i really enjoyed this poem. It would be so nice to just get lost in everything and not have a single care in the world. You did a really nice job pointing out the petty ex. the eyeliner, and then turning to something that actually means something. It's the beautiful things that get taken for granted. Thanks for sharing this.j Candi
Beautiful...I wish the same. Really I do. I want to go to a place where I can just be free. A lot of times reality just doesn't cut it. I often need a break from reality. Thus, Marijuana... LOL Anyway nice piece and keep doing what ya doing.