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    dots Submission Name: All Encompassingdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 986
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Went on a camping trip by myself & wrote this in the moonlight during the full moon.


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    dotsAll Encompassingdots

    2 KNOW within your
    2 SEE the purpose & the
    2 FEEL the pleasure & the
    2 LIVE like Abel & as
    2 OPEN a door with only
    2 HEAR His world as only He
    2 TOUCH the sky with your
    2 TRUST that Life isn't just

    Submitted on 2005-06-27 13:44:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      simple and beautiful and the description of you sitting alone at night under the moonlight gives this poem a great spiritmood.

    The structure = cool. Luv the number/caps.
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah. I get this. Very nice. Simple yet expressive. I love minimalism. Sometimes being too poetic is just excessive. But, the question is begged: 2 do all of this leads 2 what? Is that what we are supposed to answer? Like Curly's "One thing" from "City Slickers" (which is a rip off of Nietzche's Uberman.

    Again, I liked it.

    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by _n3pt | [ Reply to This ]
      very original form and intruiging poem.. this poem is a strong poem on faith and believeing and i think you did a well job on this one. although its content is short its message is enormous great job
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by Versifier | [ Reply to This ]
      very deep and insightful. we alll need reminding sometimes that there is purpose in living. uoi expand more on idea. U doint like the repitition alhtough faith isnt falling blinding it trusting in what you know. This idea come across in the poem.
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by Bloomsbury Set | [ Reply to This ]
      nice touch so true and very imaginative if we could only do some of those things there are people born that do go beyond the phenominum hope thats spelled right i have met a couple people that had the ability to do and say things others cant great write very picturous
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought this was pretty cool. different, made sense. the only thing tht distracted and annoyed me a bit was the capitalizations. other than tht it was an original..poem? or w/e you'd call it.
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]

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