Swimming deep within hells fire
A fallen angel with a scarred face
She sings to all the wicked souls
With twisted smiles and unforgotten grace
Her eyes, they gleam with menace
Tell that her heart is deep within hellís sea
As she laughs at the tortured lost spirits
And the million anguished screams
The queen of the dark empire
The lady of this prisonís flame
She dances with the shadows
And drinks the acid rain
The demons bow to her feet
And cower to her voice
As she makes her commands
With her eyes and not a noise
She caresses Satan
He entranced by her beauty
Her smile melts him away
He forgets all his duties
He gives her his fiery kingdom
And hands her all earthly treasures
All just for one single kiss
And his passion cannot be measured
When no companion or demon
Is standing in awe of her throne
She stares in shards of a mirror
Filled with despair and left alone
She glances at her charred stubs
Oh! That once was her beloved majestic wings
She cries tears of the darkest blood
For without her master, power doesnít mean a thing
I really liked this. I like how it's told like a story. I find it funny how Satan can fall in love. If you've ever heard the song "N.I.B" by Black Sabbath...Ozzy sings about the devil falling in love. I've always found that funny. But I loved the wording in this and I think you did a VERY good job in describing the surroundings of this poem. Great write!
Another amazing piece! This was an awesome read. You gave Satan qualities that I've never really imagined him having. Showing a compassionate side to him was a very different take and I was not the least bit disappointed! The ending was extremely sad, but it was great! Another great write! Candi
incredibly detailed. you used such powerful distinctive words which brought more images to my mind. i like the format of your poem. the rhyming is smoothly written without any force. it was beautiful but still dark and very emotional to me. lovely.
Yummy! Dark and tragically beautiful in its filth. You use such glorious details and I was completely entranced by this "mistress." I love the whole stanza about how she entrances Satan, it was my favorite part. This is different, I was pleasantly surprised by it. Thanks for commenting on my work!
That was really really good...and dark, which was the point, yes? Odd to think that Satan might have a wife, and what her effect on him might be, and how she really feels. Her wings being shattered, does that mean she's...less demon? Just wondering. Keep on keepin on.
this was really different! i love that even satan is tempted. i enjoyed your description of her, making her sound so coy, and seductive, and then showing a different side of her...i think it would mean more if you were clearer on symbols (if any) in the poem, because as to what means what, i'm a bit lost. and if there's not any symbols, i think it would benefit and add depth to an otherwise interesting story
Very powerful one you have here! The thought that some other being could have power over satan, that captivated me. Satan's Mistress appeared so strong and harsh, the twist on that impression in the last stanza was extremely clever. The rhyme and flow proceeded perfectly in all stanzas but the third, the usage of Her and He as the first word became trite; and in my opinion took away from the poem. Other than that, I'm in love with this poem!
man that was great descriptions and etails... almost felt like i was with this lady of darkness. its an exceptional poem: the way itreads almost like a story and the dark images are so ritch and poerful you can vision the whole thing. and i have to admit this type of poetry isnt my cup of tea i like the way you have cunjured this piece... imagine how much beter you will be when you get older... great one