And that has been done before... what it has. Anyway it is a good write. I couldn't find a mistake yet, the flow was great, I could see your despare. Yeah it was good. The thing that I thought was wrong though wasthe last stanza...
"And when I watch the dark blood pooling on the ground It reflects my face back towards me Bitter and tear-streaked; and then I drown In my own self-deserved misery"
I though that it sounded a little weird...
"Sometimes I lose my grasp of reality All I have to do is open my fist And out falls pieces of friendships that gave me gravity The ones I keep crossing off of my lists"
This is the one stanza though that stood out to me and said LIKE IT... sorry I am not normally like this... This is an average poem that could use work but is wonderful at the same time. So good job. THNX
P.S. - I hate giving people information on how to write better, I think that they should figure out on their own.