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    dots Submission Name: Works in Progressdots

    Author: JKPS613
    ASL Info:    21 / f / GA / USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 388/377/47
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       These are all unwritten excerpts from my mind. I haven't found the inspiration (yet) to finish them. Ideas would really be great. Here's some background info on each one:
    First: Actually, that has been written. I wrote it in a letter to my ex-boyfriend, but it was the only part of the letter I actually liked. And I revised it a little bit on here, because before it was clear that it was written to someone, and that just doesn't fit anymore.
    Second: I wrote this to be the beginning of a story about a stalker. Can you see it?
    Third: My December is a really good Linkin Park song that I can't get enough of, and I started to imagine what my own December would be. I hate winter, by the way.
    Fourth: Anyone who has ever actually read Pinnochio should get this reference. I mean, the Field of Dreams might be mentioned in the movie, but the book is so amazing, even though I'm seventeen. I also wrote it to be more of a song than a poem, but with the right structure, it'll work either way.

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    dotsWorks in Progressdots

    If love is too common a theme than I am by far too common a person. I speak too common a language and I live too common a life.
    "If I could write as well as you, I cannot claim I would never seek depression, but I can promise that I would make my suffering appear beautiful."
    Spring is finished.
    Summer fades.
    Fall has died.
    Winter now takes center stage.
    This life is my December,
    This day that I lose you.
    While you trample on me
    At the Field of Dreams
    All the fools are dancing
    To their get-rich-quick schemes

    Submitted on 2005-06-27 17:52:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the first. very simple and honest. honesty is the best policy. may i quote you? hah, love ash. in time i'll give a better comment - promise.
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      "Spring is finished.
    Summer fades.
    Fall has died.
    Winter now takes center stage.
    This life is my December,
    This day that I lose you."
    It was written very nicely and I can't critique something that seems to need no suggestions.
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by Lies | [ Reply to This ]

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