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    dots Submission Name: Orgasmdots

    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 1067
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       an intense pleasure of mine. enjoy

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    Oh, how it burns
    Iím sailing, Iím soaring, hurdling through galaxies
    Faster than light, lighter than dreams
    I am invincible
    I am a Goddess
    Worship in awe of my power
    Oh, and the power
    The power coursing through me, to every tip of my body,
    Throughout every inch of my body
    My body
    Throbbing, pulsating, aching
    Oh, how Iím aching
    Is there anything more?
    This is all, this is it, I donít need anything else
    Just give me one more minute of this blistering ecstasy
    This rawness, this, this
    This rough and wild Utopia
    And I am almost there
    Nothing can touch me but this electric air
    I am catapulting higher, higher than I have ever been
    Letting go, I will not let reality, or gravity hinder my flight
    I will not let facts ruin my paradise
    Not even the birds can beat me to my sky paradise
    Oh, and I tremble
    Trembling, quivering, shaking with the power
    So naked, so exposed
    Yet more assured than I have ever been in my life
    Itís building, itís gathering
    The storm is coming
    The air is shivering with suspense
    As I am about to let go and justÖ
    Thunder in my ears
    In my hearts, my toes, my lungs
    Panting, gasping
    My lungs shrieking for air
    My soul screaming for more
    The lightning flashes, the winds will moan
    As I throb and let out a groan
    I tilt my head back and let it all truly go

    Oh, how I love running

    Submitted on 2005-06-27 22:37:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I knew your gimmick from the moment I read the title. Smart way of getting people to read your stuff and now we know who all the perverts are. But seriously, great poem. The structure suited it though maybe if you focused it more you could've achieved perfection. For example in the lines

    "Iím sailing, Iím soaring, hurdling through galaxies
    Faster than light, lighter than dreams"

    you tapped a nice pattern and if you would've kept it going...
    But just a suggestion, it's a good poem nonetheless.
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by azeremen12 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this was an excellent poem, i dont see much you should change, this poem is so misleading and than it takes a huge turn. absolutely incredible! keep writing!
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by star_on_fire22 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that was such a quick turn, and i thought that it was about... well that doesn't matter, and it was such a well writtne poem, and it was like going one way so well, and then it turned, but then if you put it in the second perspective, it still works out, only with different emotions. I think it was very well written, and I love how you deceived the reader like that. That was awesome.
    Peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      baby girl i love you. It says i have to write more but seriously my friend this poem is amazingly awsome, i would just reccomend using less of the word i, but this poem sortof needs it, lol!
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by PiercedHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      this is my seocond time coming back to read this. you make it appleaing, but not in the nasty porno sense, rather in the i like to run sense. lol, you led me so far down the wrong road there. that was cruel. its funny that all the times i read this i never noticed that last line. i'm upset. laughing out loud~nahlij
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]

    Phew~ I was feeling incredibly drrrty for a moment there... and then the end caught me off guard... lyke that lame anti-drug commercial where you think she's doing something badd but then she was just going for her morning run... Yeah- well- that commercial is lame- thys poem is not... Truly a joy on both levels- erotically misleading and a great laugh to sum it up- nice work!

    Running; your anti-sexxx... lol!
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      We go from orgasm to the the thrill of running? hum...

    Nice job on this, not many people can write something, on this topic, on this level.

    I think you still need to do some work on it. Break it into stanza's...

    Um... yeah, nice work..

    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      wow 14 and you write about this. humm thats great you have real skill and i live the subject matter well done. i like that you have some thing to say with out any shame or fear that alone makes me think your going to make great poetry some day so keep writen
    | Posted on 2005-06-27 00:00:00 | by BlackLace | [ Reply to This ]

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