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    dots Submission Name: ~ autmn memory ~dots

    Author: broken_dreamer
    ASL Info:    16/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 189/172/65
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       theres summer and winter and now autmn ... keep an eye out for spring

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    dots~ autmn memory ~dots

    i can still remember
    now the summer days would fade
    how our times together
    were spent dreaming in the shade

    looking up to see the changin leaves
    now shades of red brown and gold
    even the occasional green
    soon to fall gracefully from their trees
    carried by the chilly autmn breeze

    walking hand in hand
    ever so slowly across the land
    following wherever it would lead
    the warmth of your hand in mine
    would sadly fade away with time

    the unforgettable sounds of laughter
    running to catch the train
    absolutely exhausted
    but always enjoying the race

    our memories together
    have dried up like the leaves
    and are now drifitng away
    in another autmn breeze

    Submitted on 2005-06-27 22:38:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I too liked your use of Autumn in the poem ...I write in rhyme and liked your use of it...Not always an easy style to write in...I would edit it and change the spelling of Autumn... Keep writing enjoyed reading...Desi
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful poem. i love the depiction of autumn and the faint essence of you gave to this enchanted season. i wish you would have mantain a consistent rhyme scheme but your work is your own style and i respect that... this is quite good for your age and you show a lot of potetial ... good job
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Versifier | [ Reply to This ]

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