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    dots Submission Name: Kissing thoughts of Youdots
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    Author: edthepoet
    ASL Info:    47-m-Pa
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 1476/991/125
    Words: 407
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1475
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    Description:
       I thoughts I would write a poem a about how a kiss should feel between lover. Afterall kissing is the closest portal to each other heart.


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    dotsKissing thoughts of Youdots
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    Kissing Thoughts of You

    Often throughout the day
    thoughts of our lips embracing passionately
    pushes aside any and all stress
    by seducing the mind slowly savoring and surviving on the moment we last kissed

    Images of pushing your hair back
    to expose your gorgeous face came forward
    Seeing those adoring eyes
    speaking the language of love fluently
    Inviting my lips to glide up and down your succulent neckline
    pausing momentarily to suck fervently

    Feeling you rise up on your tippy toes
    wanting to succumb to my arousing gestures
    As the rhythmic swaying of your hair
    flows from one side to the another
    making room for my warm rough tongue

    Warm sensual rushes begin flowing between our bodies
    with each rain dance our tongues dance
    Nearly splashing our intimate passion over each other
    though we dare not interrupt, nor cut short these kisses
    Letting the musky scent and perfume fragrant
    to induce a very intoxicating potion of ecstasy


    Itís always so amazing to feel your innocence, trust and vulnerabilities
    each time we kiss
    Letting me know, I am loved now and forever

    Edward K. Deputy



















    Submitted on 2005-06-28 09:27:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Six months ago, if I had read this I would've felt a little sick to my stomach and I would've proceeded to turn up my stereo (with some manner of heavy metal playing) and pretend like love did not exist. Of course, six months ago I lost someone I loved very deeply. Fortunately for me, and happily enough...love found me again. This time it has found me with renewed strength and with a more pure heart.

    In reading this now, I couldn't help but smile as I was going from line to line. Love is quite amazing indeed. And kisses are most definately one of the most passionate gestures one can make to show love. I love how passionate this peice comes across. It's as if everything else is a blank page, except these words and the two people in love. That's what love feels like though. It's you and your beloved. Everything else feels absent.

    As always I love your work. And I apologize for my absence for so long. I'm back though...and happy to start reading your work again.

    Take care dear.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. gave me chills. i have butterflies in my stomach. I could picture my boyfriend and I kissing.

    This poem was soo breathtaking. i loved it. "Images of pushing your hair back
    to expose your gorgeous face came forward" i love that line. made me smile.:)
    keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by WTF Zombies | [ Reply to This ]
      This is indeed a very nice poem. Kisses are the most sensual and meaningful show of affection that two people who love each other can share. I have always thought that the kiss is the most important and romantic part of the relationship. They can be simple and sweet or passionate like the one you have described here. I like the way you described this kiss. You captured this moment that you two shared very well with your words and your descriptions are nicely expressed. Very passionate and romantic poem this is. Nice job writing this one. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm pretty sure that you have already heard from many people what a talented writer you are. you just capture emotion so very well! love all you pieces...there can't even be criticism to be done...if that made sense...lol great job!

    dylanpoe's girl
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Feeling you rise up on your tippy toes
    wanting to succumb to my arousing gestures
    As the rhythmic swaying of your hair
    flows from one side to the another
    making room for my warm rough tongue

    this was nice.. i just loved the emotion that you captured,it's like you just painted a picture in my head of kissing a girl... truly amazing...
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      "Succulent neckline"....that is just so.....both slightly dark and wonderfully erotic..but not overly so....its one of those images that are simply perfect....and one wonders how its not been thought of before.....

    Ive only got one tiny teeny suggestion to make -

    "with each rain dance our tongues dance" - here, you've got 'dance' twice in the space of 7 words, which makes it a bit of a stumbling block...maybe change the latter 'dance' to 'perform'...or something along those lines....

    Other than that - this is gorgeous. Sensual, evocative...it leaves the reader with a slighty giddy, dizzy feeling of post-kiss desire......

    This is one heck of a kiss

    All the best,

    Katia
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Katia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the kind of stuff that I love.

    *Feeling her rise on her tippy toes*

    That's hot! I felt that as I read it reminiscing on my shorty tippy toeing to plant the luscious one on my lips. This piece reminds me of how special love is. It also informs me that you can say a lot with your lips without talking. Welcome back Ed and a piece well done.

    X
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      ed,
    a very pleasant and unexpected surprise to see you drop by my page.
    it has been too long i hope you are well and everything is going as you would like it to go.
    let me know what you have been up to and how you are.

    as for your piece, well indulgent it certainly is and you have sardinepacked it full of voluptuous images which i am sure would arouse most to want to kiss. certainly better than some of the alcohol and fag smelling ones i have had on a night out!
    i would say that you have perhaps overused the word kiss in your piece, i think i counted about four, and i think it would be more effective if you could avoid that repetition.
    but once again you offer something different and your individual perspective is refreshing

    take care
    on1eday.co.uk
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by on1eday.co.uk | [ Reply to This ]
      beautifully done! I will admit that I blushed while reading this...it had been sooooo long since I had been kissed like this...but reading this I couldnt help but to relieve each moment I'm with a friend...

    I love it when you write like this...mostly because it's proof that yes y'all...men do have romantic thoughts! and then the other half is because you do so with such imagery that I for one always get caught up in the muse...EXCELLENT!

    and...going to the fav's babe! lol
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      To be kissed in such a sensual (emotional) and passionate(physical) way that the memory of it lingers in our mind and heart for days, and on. This, is such a kiss. Awakening all senses to the moment. Each line is alight with passion. A very enjoyable read for me.
    Maybe the last line in the first stanza could be made into two.. to fit with the rest of this lovely write?
    Welcome back!
    ~ Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      these lines were the best of the piece for me:
    "Nearly splashing our intimate passion over each other
    though we dare not interrupt, nor cut short these kisses"
    nicely put
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by fallingingreen | [ Reply to This ]
      HOT DOG ED!

    *fanning self*

    THIS is what is so wonderful about your poetry...you get the reader so caught up in the mioment, that we forget how long its been since they were kissed like that...ummm

    *raises hand*

    anyways...this adoring, male poetry has been missing in your absence...welcome home!

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...is it getting hot in here or what? This was a wonderfully passionate poem and to kiss like that is amazing! You did an awesome job capturing that moment and it was exquisite! Great job...look forward to reading more!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job. Most men think of kissing as something they have to do to get to the REAL thing. I hope that this was not just written to your imagination, but to someone really lucky. It is so good to have you back. You have a real talent for writing the erotic not just the explicit. Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo! Lol im only 16 so i dont think that i have had a kiss like this yet! lol But i hope that one day it will happen and when it does i will remmeber this poem...lol Very great des riptions and good use of analogies...Your emotion is really expressed and i think that is what makes the poem so special...By the way excellent title too...Your style of writing is superb! Well i guess i should stop rambling! AWESOME JOB!
    RandiKae
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by RandiKae | [ Reply to This ]
      Sensual, sensational, superb, smooth as silk is this poem of yours. It glides off the tongue and across the page in a hypnotic rhythm that threatens to engulf the senses. You have such style when it comes to sensual writing and manage to capture the true essence of the emotion without any doubt. Wonderfully written!
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I can see, you've come back with a real PASSION for writing. This was great Ed. Your love poems are absolutely beautiful. Your gentle way of expressing love needs no graphic details, which many think is needed to get the image across. Here the images appear in our minds allowing us to create the picture of true love that lasts a lifetime. Good comeback, Ed.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]


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