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    dots Submission Name: You Yourselfdots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 1329
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1055



    Description:
       My deepest feelings at the moment.


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    dotsYou Yourselfdots
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    There comes a point in your life,
    When you must struggle within yourself.
    And your troubles, stress, and fears,
    Must be sealed and put on a shelf.

    Your tears must dry,
    And your smile again become pure.
    For there is so much more in life,
    For yourself to endure.

    All your surroundings,
    If not secure must go away.
    And instead of living in the past,
    You must live for the next day.

    Even though the sun at times,
    Turns into rain.
    Let the raindrops bring happiness,
    Instead of bringing you pain.

    Allow yourself,
    To become one once again.
    Because it's you yourself,
    In which you must depend.

    No matter how hard,
    Others try to bring you down.
    Search for what's positive,
    From all that surrounds.

    You are beautiful,
    Even when times are at their worst.
    And forever realize,
    That you yourself should always come first.




    Submitted on 2005-06-28 13:03:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very good write about self-reliance. I love the fact that you're advocating not depending on anybody else. I happen to agree with every sentiment you wrote about. It's okay to lean on people from time to time, but you are really the only person you can depend on. Great write.
    J
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is a great piece. i loved this and i really needed to read this. got some problems going on right now that i dont now what to do so we will see great write. it is going to my fav list lia.
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful, beautiful. Man I can tell you went threw so much. I mean jsut reading your poetry. You have such a good way of describing your feelings. And it puts me in shock. To me when i really want to write about something, boy it comes out, but completely all wrong. Seriously I think you are an amazing writer. And you ahve such a big talent. I can see in your work. Your work just makes me want to read more. I mean even though I am young, you write stuff that all ages can relate to. that is so amazing.

    GOing to read more of your stuff

    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really a beautiful poem! I enjoyed reading this so much. You speak such truth and the words all just flow so well! The last stanza is my favorite! I have always prided myself on being strong and independent, and you sound like you are too! This is very inspirational and truly a great write! Take care!
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Grrrr....too much scrolling down....but then, with what you have in the 'submission' box, I am really not that surprised....

    Its beautiful.

    I wish I could leave it at that, but the box wont let me.

    I could tell you what I liked....

    But that would mean re-posting your poem here.

    And whats the point of that?

    I could imagine this being a song....it almost had a melody with it, as I read through....but I think the beauty of it is that every single person will hear it to their own tune...but regardless of the melody, all will walk away with a smile, thinking 'thank you, for reminding me of what matters....living in the now and believing in yourself...and having wonderful people around you to remind you of that.....'

    Thank you, girl ....your courage is insipational....

    Katia
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Katia | [ Reply to This ]
      I really needed to read this. With the horrible death of a friend and feeling sorrow for myself it's only me who can bring myself out of this slump. Sorry that this is so short. Excellent write. Thank you. I needed this.

    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Isnt this just too cool and true. Trick is to be able to love yourself without coming off as a self centered fool, huh? But that sounds like something you also know how to do...I really liked this one li li. This was my favorite part:

    There comes a point in your life,
    When you must struggle within yourself.
    And your troubles, stress, and fears,
    Must be sealed and put on a shelf.

    Your tears must dry,
    And your smile again become pure.
    For there is so much more in life,
    For yourself to endure.

    All your surroundings,
    If not secure must go away.
    And instead of living in the past,
    You must live for the next day.

    Even though the sun at times,
    Turns into rain.
    Let the raindrops bring happiness,
    Instead of bringing you pain.

    Allow yourself,
    To become one once again.
    Because it's you yourself,
    In which you must depend.

    No matter how hard,
    Others try to bring you down.
    Search for what's positive,
    From all that surrounds.

    You are beautiful,
    Even when times are at their worst.
    And forever realize,
    That you yourself should always come first.

    ;-)

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      sniff sniff this is such a quick pickerupper if that makes sense. i loved how you hit every situiation that someone could be in and showed how to basically say screw yawll this is me like it or leave me be. keep on giving these awesome pieces girl
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a great piece and like the other comments i feel the same in that theres nothing you should change , when i read it , it was like giving yrself a telling off and pulling yrself togther , because at the end of the day if you didnt want to do it no-one could make you change , you have to help yourself.
    take care Lainie
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellant. I love that it's so positive. Every word of this is true. My favorite part was:

    "All your surroundings,
    If not secure must go away.
    And instead of living in the past,
    You must live for the next day."

    That definitely stuck out the most for me, cause that's what I'm trying to do right now. The whole thing is very well-written. Great job :-)

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      This was awesome. You truley amaze me in how you write. This poem was so true. I really don't know what to say...i wouldn't change a thing about this. It was absolutely poitively amazing. I'm sure if not all close to it can take this advice and use it in their everyday life. It was well written, and the words just came all together and had a great flow to it.


    Have a great rest of the day

    Mikki
    <3
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can only add my praise to the others, Li Li, this is very inspirational, with a great message inside.
    All of us are guilty at times of worrying too little about ourselves, and as you ended your poem with,
    "you yourself should always come first."

    Thanks for the inspiration

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      very positive. i liked that. i hardly get to read something so uplifting here, but that was very interesting.

    And forever realize,
    That you yourself should always come first.

    that was something i was always told as a kid. good memories. you're beautiful Li Li. lol. seriously. lmao. lata~jizzle
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      well said girl! you just gotta keep looking forward and know that you need to be the best you can. others will always judge, it's our nature, you just have to ignore it and remind yourself of the good things you have. pushing yourself no matter how far down you are. this was so great, you have a beautiful heart, always remember that!

    jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I think since This happens once you figure out once life is actually upon you... these arn't the tears of your past loves back and turning, or the people closest to you dying without any goodbyes... These are the realization tears of "I'm [censored]ed for the rest of my life and I don't know what to do in this world" (the real world) anyway... (hate that show) so yeah. Good write wouldn't change a thing... I have my reasons. So yeah THNX

    - Nammy

    P.S. I have felt this...
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an amazingly beautiful "new life beginning" type of piece. The inspiration in it is truly splendid and this piece can truly help a lot of people. Everyone who reads this should take heed to this poem since it is coming from a woman who has had several trials in her life and still stands today. You should be very proud of yourself...

    X
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      haha, i wish this was told at my high school graduation than about my entrance in the "real world." Everybody experiences a period of self-doubt, and you personify those moments into words. purely art. i love it and somewhere, Dr. Suess is smiling. Thank You for posting your work. it is now one of my favs.
    Peace, Lee Minsu
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Lee Minsu | [ Reply to This ]
      *sings* Me, Myself and I that's all I got in the end and from now on I'm gon be my own best friend...

    I know the words are easiest to say and the action the hardest to do...but I've witnessed first hand your strength, your determination, and your pure love, you have everything you need in life...you may not have all you want but remember..what you want and what you need often times are not the same thing no matter how much it hurts to admit.

    Always stay true to yourself Alicia...when you are beautiful from the inside out you attract the same thing...Love you sis...now...*holds leg out* knock on it... :D
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      it is amazing to see what comes from the worst of situations!

    im so glad to see the Li Li that this poem captures!

    you are right on so many levels of this piece, you must know rain to truely appreciate the Sunshine!

    lots of love girl!

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      I so love this poem, it so real and truthful on how people think when the crap hits the fan, your great advice within this poem will help not only you but many people who read this,that alone make the poem great.

    In life we try to hard to correct or believe we can will someone into doing or becoming a moral person.

    Bravo on this vry real and well written poem.
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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