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    dots Submission Name: tortured souldots
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    Author: pandora22
    ASL Info:    22 u.s.a
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 33/40/18
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
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    Bytes: 615



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       just comment.....it was just another dream


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    dotstortured souldots
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    The fires of hell,
    Burn within his soul.

    He's proud of his story,
    He wants it told.

    A series of tragic events,
    That left him inspired.

    It started long ago,
    He was a mere child.

    Now he walks as a man,
    appearing innocent and mild.

    He watches from shadows,
    awaiting his time.

    He knows that i'm different,
    He can feel me in his mind.

    His vicious intent,
    Is now focused on me.

    He dreams of the blood,
    Of the pain he will bring.




    Submitted on 2005-06-28 14:21:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was really good it flowed so well.
    i was there with you the whole time.
    the only thing is you left us all hanging is there a part two.
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by suzanne | [ Reply to This ]


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