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    dots Submission Name: Partaking Of Usdots

    Author: _winky_
    ASL Info:    25/f/minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 664/529/96
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       in the short time i've known him, it feels like we've always been friends. the sound of his voice makes me smile and my day a little brighter. i love him so much, he's one of my good friends that can never be replaced, i just hope he always knows that.

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    As I think of when we first met
    Our lives just hanging by the moment
    Those conversations I can’t forget….
    I smile with those thoughts of you
    A new found friendship to go pursue

    Our worlds were beyond comparing
    But so many late nights I struggled
    To stay awake for time worth sharing
    I couldn’t stop myself from the fall
    Especially after that telephone call

    Your voice so soft and heart so true
    The words you spoke warmed me
    It was that moment that I knew…
    A friendship building up so strong
    A place I finally feel I belong

    I do love him, I can’t disagree
    It’s grown too strong to ignore
    It’ll always be there, I guarantee
    A friendship love to tough to break
    A wonderful feeling I proudly give and take

    Submitted on 2005-06-28 14:34:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It s been a long time since i read poetry, at least on this site. Especially the ones you write, haha..

    My fav thing about this poem is that you rhymed it through without forcing it at all, as if you were truly saying what you wanted without thinking of the rhyming, but it did anyways..

    Know that I feel the same way, about our friendship and all. And it s almost as if we already had a story to tell.. about us. In the future, somewhat near future even we ll become even greater, and real-er friends. Thanks for everything.. don t give up on me on my stupid times.. or anything. Thanks!

    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very well written poem, your words portray just what you mean or at least as far as i can tell by your description...something else that i think makes this write so enjoyable is that i can relate to it...sorry i don't have any helpful suggestions, but i really don't see anything that needs fixing in this work...keep up the good work, hope you keep your friend and that he knows you love him...
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very special poem! I can relate to these words so well. I know how it feels to really love a dear friend. If you get a chance maybe read "Friends First". It is a poem I wrote and I couldnt help but think of this situation as I read yours! It is really great to have such a dear person in your life! Good expression of emotion and feelings! Take Care!
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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