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    dots Submission Name: Healingdots
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    Author: bigfineq
    Elite Ratio:    6.26 - 569/253/35
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHealingdots
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    my heart is not ready
    to love again
    the hurt is still there

    wanting to move on
    is hard
    memories are everywhere

    a lonely teardrop appears
    so slowly
    recalling past fears

    fears that must leave
    allowing
    love to achieve

    healing will shine
    promoting
    feelings to unwind

    then and only then
    love
    will be mine



    Wanda C. Tyler




    Submitted on 2005-06-28 15:33:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This takes me back to when my sons father disappeared. Of course, looking at my son, he looked alot like his father, so it was a constant reminder. Being that we had a child together, it was a blow very hard to get over. Actually, I think I'm still not over it. Still healing I guess.
    I really enjoyed the read, thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-07-09 00:00:00 | by fo | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece. The emotion was fair and the form was good. I felt this write could had offered more. But all in all this was a nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      good even flow. i've never really felt this way, although brought it to me. i can imagine after a good thing, it would be hard to love again...perhaps one wouldn't want to for a long time, i know i might not...but one may never know, it's ka. if you follow stephen king at all. take care

    brent
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      The problem I see with this poem that it is singsing,which your pain is far from that.

    Now i could still feel your pain flying off the page at me,but it lost some impact with the sing sing format.

    here's a big hug to help take some of the pain away.
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      This has such a a singsing feel to it. The form is different and very creative. I enjoyed the way it helps the readers flow through each stanza to make one complete piece, yet separates each part enough to make the reader pause and reflect on each emotion and thought. Very well done.
    Thanks for sharing,
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I like the styling you used here, instead of boring old lines.
    Each piece seemed to talk of a seperate time frame in the heartache of losing love's battle.
    Wow, I read it again, it's almost perfect!
    Sorry, but I have no criticism, only praise, very well written

    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the simplicity of this. It is a common feeling and is well conveyed by your lines. If this happened to you then I am sorry an I hope that you got your feelings out by writing it. Good job.
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]


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