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    dots Submission Name: Addictiondots

    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Friendship
    Total Views: 682
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       Just a poem about my dear, dear friend who doesn't realize the terrible mistake she is making, it something that may seem small to her, but eventually will snowball into a giant problem, creating her life into a horrible disaster...I hope she can stay strong long enough to see the truth!

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    She's weak,
    too weak to fight it,
    the addiction has gained control,
    once again,
    destroying the road she walks down,
    burning the bridges she has crossed,
    she moves forward,
    with her eyes closed,
    she's blind,
    blind to what everyone else can see,
    she has no direction,
    she is lead by him,
    he is her addiction,
    her sin,
    her heart is stained by him,
    he will destroy her,
    once again,
    destroy everything in her life,
    yet she deceives the ones who care,
    as she welcomes him back,
    she's addicted....

    Grant her the SERENITY to except the things she cannot change,
    The COURAGE to change the things she can,
    and the WISDOM to know the difference...

    Submitted on 2005-06-28 15:37:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      how beautiful. I wonder if that's how my friends feel about me now. I don't blame them. I thought this would be about your friend being addicted to drugs, but it seems that this kind of addiction (from which I also suffer), can be more dangerous than anything else in the world. This is a beautiful poem.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Addiction is a powerful thing to over come...All we can do hope our friends and love ones have the strength it takes, for only they can overcome it...It has to come from within...I wrote a poem about my sons addiction..It's called "Addiction" ...He still struggles with it...but is still with me...I thank God everyday...There are all kinds of addictions in this world...Hope your friend can overcome...Desi..
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with childs. I really like the ending. If you don't mind me asking... Have you let your friend read this? It might be the key to her uderstanding. This poem could show her just how much you care about her and that might be enough to let her let go of her addiction as you called it.
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved the sequence of the poem the way you introduced her, the subject, and the problems. I agree with childs about the opening line being powerful. It is a real captivator. There is a good balance between telling a story with emotion and moral. GoodJob overall.
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Tischpeachez | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the whole poem. The suspense is there. I liked the way you introduced the object of her addiction. Then you bring in three meanings of hope to balance out the poem with an emotional plea. Overall as a whole...reality is there. Good theme great writing. Wanda (bigfineq)
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the ending of your poem, almost pray like, however the only thing is the all caps is a bit too much.

    Loved your opening line "She's weak" very powerful.
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]

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