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    dots Submission Name: And There Was...dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 786
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 837



    Description:
       Thoughts I had while working on a presentation for my boss. Didn't have a lot of time to work this out but wanted to get something down as to not forget!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsAnd There Was...dots
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    There was a smile
    spare in my heart
    and I grinned in wishfulness as <@>
    passed "IT" to U

    There was a song
    echoing in my mind
    and I caroled in freedom as <@>
    passed "IT" to U

    There was a laugh
    rumbling in my belly
    and I chuckled in Love as <@>
    passed "IT" to U

    There was a thought
    alive in my soul
    and I envisioned in Peace as <@>
    passed "IT" to U

    There was a tear
    drowning my sight
    dropping in loneliness as <@>
    I took the pain from U

    There was a divine breath
    blowing bubbles in creation
    embracing "IT" which we
    share & which we DO





    Submitted on 2005-06-28 18:01:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i'm glad i went back & checked this one out..
    makes one feel that the world might not be such a bad place after all...especially with folks like the author of this piece in it.
    thanks!
    smiles!
    D.A.T.
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by Deep Ace Thinks | [ Reply to This ]
      What an inspiring piece... each part flows with the other and just rolls off the tongue. If only there were more out there like you who want to "give" joy to others.. through a smile, a song, a laugh, a thought, a tear..and through devine breath. Very nice Tiff. I enjoyed reading this.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, this is one of the best "Tiffspeak" poems you've written, even the repetition didn't spoil it.
    Nice, beautiful thought, PT, and obviously sent with the abundance of love that lives in you.
    Simply lovely
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the feel of this poem. It has a heartfelt sentiment conveyed in the words simplicity. I was a bit thrown off by the flow at first but i did enjoy it once i realized that the ascii symbols were an eye. good job!
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]


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