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    dots Submission Name: the real medots
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    Author: lynxstarfire
    ASL Info:    26/Feline/MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 100/106/54
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 356
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       This is a poem i wrote to describe my journey... constructive criticism appreciated but please be gentle...


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    dotsthe real medots
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    there is another person inside of me,
    a person who luckily most can't see,
    she hides herself behind the walls,
    of tough demeanor and big brass balls,
    pretending to be what everyone wants,
    following their rules doing their stunts,

    inside she is crying and begging to be free,
    begging I acknowledge her as the real me

    inside me is a little girl, alone and very scared,
    walking a path for which she was not prepared,
    pretending to be something she's not,
    afraid if she doesn't she'll loose what she's got,
    so she created and wears quite well her mask,
    and she'll certainly tell you if you just ask,

    inside she is crying and begging to be free,
    demanding I acknowledge her as the real me,

    inside me is a teenage girl fiery at heart,
    telling me to correct the mistakes from the start,
    embrace my true nature set my soul-self free,
    realize who I am and what makes up ME,
    open my heart and open my mind,
    free myself from societal confines,

    inside she's screaming and demanding to be free
    demanding I embrace her as the real me,

    inside me is a woman, strong and proud,
    insisting I explain why she's never let out,
    telling me the foolishness of hiding myself,
    explaining the dangers to my mental health,
    her wisdom prevails and I give in,
    releasing my true self from deep within,

    Outside She is weeping tears of joy,
    no longer forced to live as a boy,
    she firmly insisted I set her free,
    and now I embrace her as the real me...




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      Great! I support those who support being yourself. I've had the similar journey and I decided to follow my heart and although it's been a bumpy road that I DO NOT regret, it makes me feel proud that the bumps, I did. The gold bricks to cover that gloomy, lonely, saddening dirt road I will also do, and with self-respect and dignity. Thanks. You are not alone. We are all strong soldiers in this war against society's Artificial Lifestyle that was created before us. Sad, but true. Keep up the good work.

    Unique Woods xoxoxo
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by UNIQUEWOODS69 | [ Reply to This ]
      I was listening to Gorillaz - Clint Eastwood when I was reading this, "I ain't happy I'm feeling glad, I got sunshine in a bag ~ I'm useless but not for long...the future is comin on".
    This totally was just flowing with that beat and it was almost like your poem was an awesome mix with it.
    I thought this was very sincere and illustrates how we oft fear the divine spirit of our soul - and the negativities of the world get us down but "IT"s always there within us & that is our purpose and gift ~ to BE.
    Great!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...I did not expect it to end like it did...This was very well written...Telling of a coming out from hiding to be ones self...To accept yourself for who you are not what society or gender dictates you to be... I think a little caps would be nice...but I liked it and the surprise ending...Thanks for sharing...Desi
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]



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