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    dots Submission Name: In Love with a Dead Poetdots
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    Author: Poechick13
    ASL Info:    16/f/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 42/59/22
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 193
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       Sometimes I am told I am overly obessive when it comes to Poe. Call me strange if you will, I take no offense! Tell me what you think of this!


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    dotsIn Love with a Dead Poetdots
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    I strayed outside, and 'neath a tree-
    I found a painting just for me.
    A painting of the one I love.
    A frame made of gold filigree.

    In oils of purple and of blue-
    Smiling at me, the face of you!
    And in each eye, there did reside-
    A lovely cast of greener hue.

    Rememb'ring now, the times we shared;
    The foreign trips, the way we cared.
    My handpicked rose, your lovely prose-
    The first time that at me you stared.

    Then suddenly you disappear.
    And in this frame, there is no smear-
    Of blessed paint, martyr or saint.
    Thus revealing my oldest fear.

    The love we had, had never been.
    My loneliness is my worst sin.
    I am alone, and should have known-
    My only love died way back when.

    Two hundred years or more have passed-
    Since your legend words first were massed,
    Since your smile owned its own style;
    Your themes macabre so lovely cast.

    So rest in peace my painted prince.
    Your raven has lived ever since,
    Your blessed pen, did first begin-
    To weave tales of death and suspense.




    Submitted on 2005-06-29 02:15:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A very intriguing poem...as was said below..
    I was just wondering...is this kind of a rewrite (same idea, but upgraded) of your other song, 'Trapdoors Into Destiny' (- or sth like that) ?
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by shoggoth | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece of work. You are not afraid to show your feelings. There's nothing wrong with how you feel about Mr. Poe. I especially liked the part where you stated the" love had never been" you gave reason. You had a spiritual love that generated from admiration and fascination. A yearning need to relate, and that's alright. Towards the ending you paid tribute to your "prince". Am I picking up some sense of closure? A well written poem that I enjoyed. Great Job! Wanda (bigfineq)
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally am more in love with Vergil, but to each her own. I like the way you use the painting as a metaphore for your relationship wiuth your long dead lover. While I know that sometimes the poet does have to bend words to fit the meter of the poem, I think "layed" in the first stanza is a bit too awkward in that respect.
    ~VanillaLeaves
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by VanillaLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your poetic style here. This is written quite well I think. I enjoyed reading it through. And let me tell you, there are worse ones to be in love with than a dead poet.. so hurray for your admiration of Poe.
    There are some very lovely lines in this.. and it reads quite well. I wouldn't change anything.
    You painted a very unique picture here of a love that had never been.. between you and he. Sitting 'neath the tree.. looking into his eyes..remembering times shared.. then to be left alone.. etc.
    I like these lines -> "So rest in peace my painted prince. Your raven has lived ever since,"

    Just a very lovely write..enjoyable to read.

    Take care!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]



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