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    Author: detatched
    ASL Info:    26/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 7/9/7
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 231
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    Sunshine bittered by time
    And melting the frost
    Of jeer.

    Surpassed in magnitude
    By the movement of the waves,
    Kissing the shore
    In rhythmic majesty.

    The light softens, turning red,
    Setting the east ablaze.

    The sky becomes host to the night,
    Allowing the moon to spy
    Upon the day's trappings.

    The wind grows cold,
    And clouds gather overhead.
    The sweet smell of purity
    Rapes the senses.

    The cold touch of rain
    Kisses the earth,
    Quenching
    It's solidarity.




    Submitted on 2005-06-29 05:52:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very peaceful and calming. I really believe you captured the mood of a sunset well, at least I think that's what you were going for. The whole 'setting the east ablaze' thing confused me, because the sun sets in the west.

    Am I totally off here?
    Maybe it's just the transitioning... Hmmmm.

    Tragicly,
    Heroes couldn't die this well
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]



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