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    dots Submission Name: Bitch am I?dots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    19/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 451/400/125
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       My relationship with my mom I think that sums it up.


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    dotsBitch am I?dots
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    Thats right,
    say it again.
    I know you want to.
    Scream what a bitch I am,
    how gods damned lazy.
    Whats that?
    Didn't fold the laundry right.
    Damn lazzy ass bitch am I?
    Forgot to turn on t6he dryer.
    Stupid slut am I?
    I'm not hungery.
    Disrespectful bitch am I?
    Look at you wrong,
    because you throw a cell phone in my face.
    Now I have a mother fucking attitued?
    I don't know where we're going.
    So now I'm a stupid lazy bitch,
    who's in your way.
    Easier if I weren't here huh?
    I love you too.




    Submitted on 2005-06-29 09:51:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a good way to illustrate your anger. I have a similar relashionship with my mothers and yes it's very frustrating at times and not pleasant at all since you have to live with her and all.

    I especially liked the sarcasm at the end where you said "I love you too"

    Great job, keep expressing your feelings through writing.
    | Posted on 2005-11-06 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...very powerful. The anger is clear, and despite the minor spelling errors, is very good...I can relate. I winced when I read this, mainly cause I never want to see you be hurt by anyone, and this obviously does...very good. I'm trying to be unbiased, let me know how well I did...
    Storm
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      way to go i could feel the steam from here feels good to let someone have a piece of the pie they feed you everyday aye i hav never written a rant or rave to many years of holding back not enough paper ha ha
    great post
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      You just said exactly what I was thinking! Good for you! I think it's good you're expressing yourself like this. It beats beating people but of course beating people seems to be more easier to do sometimes!
    Lies
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Lies | [ Reply to This ]
      strong high in emotion i bet you worte this form expirience. its a good poen i like it. it shows individuality, but i got hooked on this one
    xox reiza
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, powerful. You're like a time bomb waiting to go off. I wish that you had a better relationship with your mom, but every relationship can't be perfect. Though you had some spelling mistakes, this was well written. It shows your anger, and how you feel about what's going on. Great job as usual, keep it up.
    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      Very explosive. Good retorts. There is so much angry passion in that its untrue but it is a scenario that I'm sure a lot of people can see. Just as well your writing to let it out it seems.
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Hidden_depths | [ Reply to This ]


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