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    dots Submission Name: First sightdots
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    Author: Hidden_depths
    ASL Info:    20/F/England
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 37/34/11
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 341
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 272



    Description:
       It stems from a romantic preconception I have of how people in love view things as if screening them, noticing each change however slight.
    And that each chane just reaffirms any feelings because you properly 'see' that person. I dont think I can get it right.


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    dotsFirst sightdots
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    He watched her closed eyes reflecting silver moonshine,
    It was cycloned down through the eye of a distant storm.
    Breath invigorating, full of freshness, relaxed the pained face.
    He loved her then and with eyes, sparkling, wide open, she loved him too.




    Submitted on 2005-06-29 09:57:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It was sweat but it sounds more like the beginning of a love novel then a poem. It dosen't sound like its from the heart. Thats where poetry comes. It was well writen though.
    Sarah
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      this wasnt really wat i was expecting, i read your desciption and i thought id get some movement. your idea is good but just needs somthing else i think
    xox reiza
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]



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