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    dots Submission Name: Mutual Surgerydots
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    Author: His Assholiness
    ASL Info:    35/M/Tampa, FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.06 - 104/90/23
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 317
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is a love poem I wrote for a friend from England, all Cyrano-style, so's he can show his love/lust for a young lady...I hope it works for him.


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    dotsMutual Surgerydots
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    The scalpel glints within
    Your excited and quivering hand.
    It matches mine with its
    Crimson drips of coagulated
    Sanguine bliss.

    Piles of crumpled dermal oaths
    Litter our altar, our bed.
    Names pass impassioned lips
    As the blades dig to bone,
    Sinew and marrow.

    Muscles pulse in orgiastic
    Spastic twitches with each
    Tender passing of our steel
    Sliced and shorn,
    Expressions of sincereity and love.

    From our self-imposed racks
    We shall finally see
    Through each other's eye.
    Reaching inside of you,
    I leave the pieces of
    Me that are worthy
    Of your glory.
    You will replace all
    The cancerous parts
    Still inside of me.

    As the entrails braid and fall
    From our sacred operating table,
    My bared heart beats against
    Yours in the whole of us.

    Peel the skin from our third eye
    So the new heights
    We might attain.
    Icarus touched the sun
    And so we can too,
    Through our loving pain.




    Submitted on 2005-06-29 10:29:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      woah! every poem i read of yours blows me away! your words are just normal words, but when you write them they seem so much stronger. it kinda made me wince a bit though, i have a thing with skin being sliced open, it gives me shivers, like fingernails down a black board... i like that it ryhmes in parts. i'm not very good at commenting, sorry. i just wanted to say that i like your poem, i don't know enough to tell you what's good and what can be fixed and so forth... from angela
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by m with two i_s | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty gothic, mister. i do hope it does the trick. sounds familiar to me, though. at least the surgery theme does...i did a few of those in my day, too. think i might have posted one or two here, who knows. have you read mine? yes...you read one, i believe, anyway. great minds think alike, i guess.
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]



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