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Lucky Stones

Author: marysunshine
ASL Info:    34, Female,
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Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Rural Ohio Roads tend to have great gravel

Lucky Stones

Lucky stones of quartz
on the beigey-silty dust
of Ohio’s rural roads
found piled in the ditches
where the Tiger Lillies live
and the Queen Anne’s Lace takes root
without an eye or hand of man,
but by the robins and the crows
that frequent all the swimmin’ holes

Gravel to the workingman
with limestone, granite, dolomite
to keep the rain from washing ‘way
the road that few will travel on.
Remains unpaved for all these years,
since not a soul has walked this way
or near, or within twenty miles,
(well no one of great consequence
according to the measure-marks
of nowadays)

But child, you will see the stones
that shimmer in the hottest sun,
and by the lilies and the lace
you’ll bend to look at earth’s great gem,
the lucky stones that fill the gullies
of Ohio’s rural roads,
and you’ll wipe the dust away
with a little spin and shine,
then you'll have a treasure fine
to keep.

Submitted on 2005-06-29 14:24:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was great, I'm definitely reading some of stuff every so often just to see how it varies...I must go and find the road less travelled in my room...adios!
| Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Siren Mengana | [ Reply to This ]
  Ahhh...nice. Shiny, pretty gems for the little people. Love the stuff about the Tiger Lillies and such, the birds' garden.

The meter pushes this along nicely and adds to the overall hopeful feeling it exudes. This is absolutely perfect for the mood that I'm in. Thanks for sharing it.
| Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]

i liked it. its nice to read a poem about something that sounds good or hopeful. The only thing i didn';t like about it was the last line. It didn;t seem to flow like the rest. I really liked the flow of it. it just keeps going. the discription and diction are really good too.

| Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by annaeliz18 | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh wow (and when a comment starts off like that you know it's good). Mary Sunshine (great name) this poem was above and beyond... so innocent and soo incredably beautiful... where do i begin... the way you allowed me to get lost in rural Ohio was fantastic, this is a kind of poem one memorizes so they may close their eyes, recite it, and be swept away to another, more peaceful place. I'd be happy to add this to my favorites list and get started on that right away... you're quite the poet and i look forward to getting to know more of your work... Take care my friend... and have fun haveing fun.

| Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]

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