Iloved this poem. For the reason I can relate to verbal abuse in the family. You did a good job with this poem. You spoke your heart, and that's to me the best writing. I'm sorry if you lived through that. Great writing. Maggie
I love it completly and totally, not because it was written well but because it goes along with thoughts people think everyday but no one has the courage to say. Unfourtunatly i do think you need to space it out alittle I found myself reading the same line over and over because I got lost and there are a few spelling errors, but that just shows you were caught up in writting it.
Wow!Alot of hasty words, seems pretty deep though, kid. It was wild in term. It was nice how I was able to connect to it, especially since I'm in a bad humor type mood. It's always nice to rant about what on your mind. I sure hope the stuff you said here wasn't so tru as it sounded tho.
this is crasy but i am sure it is happening to you or someone you no i am not at words lost but i guess i am you paint a cruel picture over my years my mom has done some things to better this person in your thought she is not dead yet but in my eyes she died 15 years ago as that is when i put my life seperate from hers anyways i like your poem just hits home great post enjoyable read thanx sandman
ur words are like blades that are slashing my veins u act nice in front of all of my friends but once we get home the real sh it begins it's like i see double when we're out it's cool, but at home i'm in trouble u have 2 hurt me with ur words and ur fists at times i wish that we'd both cease 2 exist
i liked this one a lot. it was good even without a rhyme scheme. raw emotion made prose. another freestyle. mine is about my dad. i think ur poem is about ur stepdad right. i hope he stops being such a bi tch. "troy"