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    dots Submission Name: The light of the moondots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 297/235/58
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 291
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    Description:
       If you have read my journal, then you will be able to moreso understand the meaning of this poem, The moon should be appreciated by all, It's a sight that I have personaly enjoyed.


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    dotsThe light of the moondots
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    The reflection of the sun, appearing on the moon is the being of night the coming of noon

    The next day will be arriving, one day after another, a minute turns into an hour the moon the sun will cover

    The moon will be shining till it's finished it's song
    it will be for but a while...not for long

    Cherish this moment, cherish the time
    Gazing at the moon is not a sin nor a crime

    It shines on the oceans, the seas and the lakes
    It even shines on hale, raindrops, and snowflakes

    The moon is the light through which we can see at night, the moon is our nightlight, not too dark but not too bright.

    It is our rock that revolves around earth
    It is the rock inwhich earth had gave birth

    Yes, I know that everyday will be the coming of noon, but please do not forget the light of the moon.




    Submitted on 2005-06-29 15:28:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOw great job, you describe everything clearly so that i can see the beauty of the moon, i hope you will write more poem like this. Take care and have a nice day
    -garnet4david-
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cute, interesting very inventive. Ilike your imagery, meter and your rhyme. Iliked this a lot. I believe you men "cherish" and one other tiny suggestion.

    "It is the rock of which earth had given birth"

    If you visit my site take a look at something of mine.

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! you are very intuitive...seems you focus on the very details I ignore, which can serve well @ the hint of my perspectives- May the Dragons be Saved.
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]


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