Flow through me
Drawn in...shoved in
Holy and liberated
Suck it in
Soak it up
Feeding my blood
this is so fast... choppy... well written. i too am gonna go with saying it sounds very like you are talking about drugs and yet it is vague enough for it to be other things too...
kinda an oxymoron and yet makes complete sense... says so much in so few words... really... the only way to convey highs is to write like this or to use millions and millions of words... not many ppl can do either well... youve completely nailed it...
captures the cyclic addictive nature of addiction itself... very well done rachel... really...
I like this...it is very emotional. I don't know if i'm right...but it seems as if it is about drugs...like needles and coke and stuff like that. Cuase of the white powder and the end reminds me of needles...*shivers* Needles scare me. I think the last 2 lines were really deep. Great job....
I love the choppy short lines and the way they actually ease into one another. The whole thing sounds to me like it might possibly be someone in the grips of heroin or some other injected drug, though it is vague enough that it could mean many things. Whatever it is I love the style...