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    dots Submission Name: aren't i?dots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 619/553/204
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Lyrics/What you did
    Total Views: 210
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1605



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    Why did you leave me mother?
    Why have you left me father?
    Was I not good enough?
    Why did you hate me grandpa?
    Why’d you despise me grandma?
    Was I not deservent of your love?

    You turned your back on me,
    When I was in dyer need
    You left me there to die,
    I was given no reason why
    You kicked me when I was down,
    Made sure I stayed on the ground
    Laughed at me when I blead,
    To you I’m already dead

    Why did you abuse me mother?
    Why have you neglected me father?
    What have I done to you?
    Why did you disown me uncle?
    Why’d you ignore me auntie?
    Was it something I didn’t do?

    You turned your back on me,
    When I was in dyer need
    You left me there to die,
    I was given no reason why
    You kicked me when I was down,
    Made sure I stayed on the ground
    Laughed at me when I blead,
    To you I’m already dead

    Why did you kill me mother?
    Why have you destroyed me father?
    Is it really all my fault?
    Have you forgotten me sister?
    Do you remember me brother?
    I’m to blame for it all?

    You turned your back on me,
    When I was in dyer need
    You left me there to die,
    I was given no reason why
    You kicked me when I was down,
    Made sure I stayed on the ground
    Laughed at me when I blead,
    To you I’m already dead!

    Aren’t I
    Aren’t I
    Aren’t I
    Aren’t I?






    Submitted on 2005-06-29 22:25:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Amazing... u just have the layne staley mind...well, u should really put them into music... i think u could put tunes to complete this fantastic writting...
    can't stop reading them...
    Caio
    | Posted on 2005-11-09 00:00:00 | by ctsilva | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...i can kind of relate to what you are saying not completely tho. if this really has happend to you personally i think your better without them but thats my opinion. this was very powerfull and you could feel the emotion in it. i loved it even though its a harsh reality...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this for real? Did you family really do that to you? I don't know what to feel, because that never happened to me. I hope your having a great life with out them, and if your not; than i wish you the best in your life <and i mean that.
    Kay
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]


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