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    dots Submission Name: No Name Lovedots
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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 766
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Somestuff I came up with for a different approach, my comp is freaking out, so whatever, please kleave commentys.


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    dotsNo Name Lovedots
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    Trying once just to fail is of nature, this virus spreading it's flocking aflictions to all. The red of the rose signifies the love which I'm not able to express. " Sticks and stones may break my bones, but your words will never hurt me." Tested to that leads to false, certain words from your lips only would drive me into an unescapable fissure to my feet.
    Is it love to say that I would sell my soul to save yours? A storm of imperfection at myself if that's true. I want my soul to be at one with yours, to share the bond I'm so dying for.


    With I love you for my dying breath. You will never know, for you don't understand my sad verse.




    Submitted on 2005-06-30 02:16:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this poem. I'ts very deep and even tho it was a free verse, it was still very moving. I also loved the "sticks and stones" because it is very true. Words can hurt sometimes if they know exactly what to say to hurt you. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by SorrowfulMind | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...that was really deep. i loved how you brought the say "sticks and stones..." into play and how it is not always true, because words can cut you deep and can be hard to heal from sometimes. and i love the end starting at "Is it love..." this was a truely amazing piece. great job.
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]


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